ok 10-15 lines
no sway no b/s no crew no hate
check in, u spit 1st

Yo ima vote and give feedback as soon as this is dun, can ya peep this fo me

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=71321

sorry dawg i only got like 5 posts lol, is he gana show or what.............................................. .................................

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ight my bad............................................... ............peep it wit Feedback thol................................

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=71321

yea im here whaz the due date on this?

i got no prob wit dropin first as long as i got an acceptable date

Da Jocka, do me a favour and peep this wit an honest vote

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=71321

Promise Ill peep this when its done

peace

can u post tonight if not then i can cuz u only need a 10 line min. but if ya cant i feel ya.........

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ok man im gana spit i dont know what ya doin cuz this been up long enough and i dont find it very hard to write 10 lines so im gana spit my verse and good luck jus get it in befor the yrs over thats all i ask, well good luck


hes lickin his lips for saliva, bitch is goin down hill like "calvin cline"
this battles mine, u need precription glasses cuz this shit so fine
this bitch talkin likes he oldschool, and hes gangsta
quick to pick up his peice, and if u was his mom, quick to bang-ya
im cuttin u down like they did in ur circumcision, but ill leave a stub like they jus left u a vision
as i wrote i made the decision, to leave u like the docters left ya, bare, ur life will need reliven
ur as whack as that show driven, but u wanna be on MTV made
ur gana be 35 yrs past ten, and ur goal on MTV is to get laid
uve been on ur back many times but not anything good
many times uve been knocked out cuz u belong "in da hood"
ur one of those southern rap chaps sippin there syrup, eatin flap jacks this bitch beter leave
pretended there paul bunyan, ur nuttin but a tall tale, all ur success stories are "make-beleive"

not my faverite shit in the worlds but it will due

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o sorry man didnt realize ya wanted it done so soon....ight ill just keystyle some shit....w/e

boxen ya ears maken them bleed so ya cant hear tha lyrix/
afta this little battle you'll know now to fear this//
silly punches are just like yo face they grotesque/
laughin at ya verses cuz ya bittin so bad iz burlesque//
ya punches like fighten girls wit wet nails they aint hittin/
yo wackness could fill pailz an ya lines are all bitten//
comin at ya wit dat hardcore sound up from the ground/
by my words your bound leavin ya burried 6ft unda a mound//
You had no idea that this joka coud eva be so hardcore /
but ill keep you desprite to rhythm seeking lines more and more //

burlesque noun: a composition that imitates somebody's style in a humorous way

joka had this he was betta all round

hey could you and vote on my battle

rico v alter-ego

safe

yeah man its a battle so i though they was posed to be keystyles, and yo rico thats b/s not sayin he didnt have me but explain yo votes, nuttin worst then hearin " hey yo joka da this, he was better, now i did u a favor so hit this up" thats b/s explain on how we can improve

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yo joka had way better punchs wordplay and flow vote joka and go vote on the d-mecca vs 4fifth battle ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

um i cant cuz im in fifths crew...an i agree wit grotesque some of these votes should be beda explained

Joka got this easily

better wordplay dissing and flow

not bad JOKA
Hit up my battle against JOE BLACK

boxen ya ears maken them bleed so ya cant hear tha lyrix/
afta this little battle you'll know now to fear this//
(good starter)

silly punches are just like yo face they grotesque/
laughin at ya verses cuz ya bittin so bad iz burlesque//
(nice personal)

ya punches like fighten girls wit wet nails they aint hittin/
(lol thats good)
yo wackness could fill pailz an ya lines are all bitten//
(not so good)

comin at ya wit dat hardcore sound up from the ground/
by my words your bound leavin ya burried 6ft unda a mound//
You had no idea that this joka coud eva be so hardcore /
but ill keep you desprite to rhythm seeking lines more and more //
(super finish)