Its been a long time in love and pain but how soon I forget/
That the majority of the love was aimed by me to a target/
Whom seemed she wanted it untill she turned twenty one/
And now its negativity bein shot back by a bitter gun/
Oh I felt so lost but losing it means you can be found/
But how akward will it be knowin that shes still around/
Ive been here befor but instead of my wrist I cut the ties that bound/
Its negativity going through lifes amp, I hear tha bump and hit the Ground/
Its been a long time since I felt such an emotional tremor/
I think that ended three years ago this coming december/
No matter how bad the mind blocks it out the heart will remember/
So it gets shut down the letters of love become returned to sender/
And its been a long time since I've felt so poetic/
But its been even longer since I've felt so pathetic/
Keep it buried and keep on every day like your copesetic/*
But its now my dutie to tell you Judie will overwhelm your heart/
I coulda prevented any pain but my heart wouldnt Let it/
Over a year I brought myself to tears and utmost pleasure/
but everything in the end will seem worth it, depending on the weather/
If its rainin or warm "nobody sees the tears when your standin in the storm/
Slug said it best but I'm finishing it with proper props cause I'm reborn/

(Dont say I bit that shit cause I gave proper props so fuck yall)
(Kinda a keystyle/ poetic thoughts, I dont expect positive feedback or anything, but shit needed
to get off of my chest)
* I think I spelled this wrong

T- Aka Travis Jonathyn Toole

this was a nice piece,... filled with emotions and good scheme. At times I felt like it fell apart, but can't really point it out.
fav line :

No matter how bad the mind blocks it out the heart will remember/
So it gets shut down the letters of love become returned to sender/

that line spoke to me.
It's give the piece an 8/10...
nice piece, nothin but respect

peace

this didnt fall apart and I dont think slug or ant would
be angry if they heard this ever...your flow was consistent
and the vocabulary throughout it didnt make it seem like
another corny love poem, you added that ill substance
which made me more enticed to read on..and reply

if I knew ya id break this down more but overall
you came very nice with this T Square....

seeing your full name I can say its
origonal and not just a gay name
your names not gay...dont get mad homie

peace

Was a good piece. Held strong and well. You didn't flood it with cliches. And kept it quite personal, yet also a certain amount of distance. Keeping it fairly profound in a sense.

..er, that's all i have to say about it actually.

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