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Old 08-15-03, 04:15 AM   #1
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Elite Frontlines - The Re-Birth

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In this cerebral oddyssey, I'm a unique verbal oddity,
performing sodomy, on who display animosity upon me,
fatalities all around, with wrath ending breath intake,
swarms of hellfire, blaze the path, to my empire's gate,
clear the slate to erase your past, cause I chalk up your fates,
you're just scratches on the board, you can't afford to hate -
one another with me, as a common enemy, no defendin me,
once I strike and, my words alter your lifespan, indefinately,
despite man, all land will be clenched tightly in my right hand,
for infinite days, world set a blaze with my scepter as a mic stand,
slowly but surely, you'll lower your guard, and fight poorly,
my rage will fill that void, you'll be destroyed and bow before me,
happens so quickly, think or blink and death comes swiftly,
sound barrier ship speed, your blood writing my sadistic creed,
no chance to breathe, before I'm planting my infectuos seed,
through vains to the brain, before the heart gets a second beat...
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Old 08-15-03, 02:22 PM   #2
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Old 08-15-03, 02:35 PM   #3
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Its nice... good wordplay n shit, Could do with more metaphors.. flow was weak in some places..
like oddity and upon me - couldda been done better

but in other places like

once I strike and, my words alter your lifespan, indefinately,
despite man, all land will be clenched tightly in my right hand,
for infinite days, world set a blaze with my scepter as a mic stand,


it was sick

I give it a big fat 8
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Old 08-15-03, 03:21 PM   #4
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pretty good, flow wise it was nice...a little simplistic..

held it down with tight metas and internal rhyming...

good stuff man..keep writing.
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Old 08-15-03, 03:22 PM   #5
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get the fuck outta here.
biter. lord of the rings.
seriously.. fuck you and your
bitten rhymes.. fuck whatever
admin let you back... fuck this.
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Old 08-15-03, 03:24 PM   #6
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lol phrantik dont like that guy
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Old 08-15-03, 08:02 PM   #7
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Re: Elite Frontlines - The Re-Birth

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It was aiight.....good vocab....flow was a little weak......wasn't
really feelin the topic...i mean kinda sound like a dictator..lol...
other than that.....it was decent......but one question?...


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performing sodomy, on who display animosity upon me,



are u a sexual predator?
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Old 08-16-03, 02:35 AM   #8
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only on the batte field, but in phantiks case im willing to make an acception.
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Old 08-16-03, 02:55 AM   #9
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lol......i wanna see some suckin and fuckin
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Old 08-16-03, 09:53 PM   #10
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^^^HE SUCKS!!!!
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