Fear flows like water, slowly filling the room/
My mental mediocrity prophesising my impending doom/
Not emotianally strong, my mind tells me I'm wrong/
My mind screaming, my faults telling me I cant't go on/
Mind clouded by sin and pain, soul hounded by demonic acid rain/
The walls close in, as I pound and scream in vain/
No one can hear or see, my emotional prison slowly killing me/
My imperfections shown through a TV screen/
Killing me that I can't be those rappers on MTV/
Drowning in my own insecurity/
Floating away in emotional slo-mo/
Fuck no, too late I've let go/

Why u posted this twice?

Damn, it wasn't on purpose. Must have double clicked the post button.

Anyways This piece was nice for a newbie , the first seven lines were Sick , but the last 5 lines were Whack..........U fell off , and that messed you up..............I see u had some nice Wordplay in there.............Ur vocab was aight , Overall This piece was Aight , I give u a 6.5/10 , Return the favour http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=72854

No other comments? Anyone? Plz?.............................