Until a loaded nine-is unloaded to blow mine-from my caroaded spine- and Im left flat line you aint seeing my erroded mind-
Been ahead of time-paint defeats so you can fallow the signs…

Sounding like you is a crime... stand before the court-
You career is sentenced to die so many times we can the obituarary reports-
your next life will contort-before the first aborts-
Want rhymes as dope as my lines…. call a Columbian import-
JOCK my style if you like ill diss you for the SPORT-
Your producer pays me bucks to collab,but I wont fuck with you….
im no Male Escort
Im prone to jump on microphones and battle-get a grip. but you cant handle-
The words I smple that dismantle nerves-
Tackle-punches. Hooks. And verbs-
combos that could leave Mike Tyson served-
your careers had its’ up’s and downs because your sex preference swerved-
I paid dues-you paid dudes-to ride that ass without anal lube-
CENTZ plow through vowels- now im back so im twice as foul-
Screaming fuck beef while I make you molest a cow-
Is there still doubt? That I’m not about- what comes out-my mouth-
the price of you life is a freestyle that I gave at twice the diss~count- amount.\
explain that!!!!!! No (waite I just explained fact)!!!!
You the shakespearean (waist sonnet of rap)-
your story is just a garbage act_ this win is sealed that’s a wrap-
orgasms from the way my lyrics penetrate and thrust-
at first I said I was cuming now you can sample how I bust-
I don’t love the music its just a lust-
To find rappers that suck and leave them fucked-
I don’t flow no moe I peddle smut-
this kid is a bitch so he get treated like a slut-

clever word play and pretty good vocab

your flow is a little lacking, unless you harbor some ackward style.

I DO PAUSES SPEED SHIFTS AND TWISTS ALOT LIKE CHINO XL BUT ALSO IM STILL GETTING THE RHYTHM PRT DOWN SO IM BUILDING ON IT WHANKS THOUGH SINCERITY MEANS ALOW AND YOU GAVE ME THAT I WILL WORK ON IT HARDER

You should get at that nigga, Word, I called him out for a battle to see what's crackin'..I'm gon merk this nigga on time cuz dude is just a pure hater, fam. Once you get the bar structure down, you be ill, fam. Holla at ya boy.

nice piece



that was a sick line, really rolled of da tounge nicely, I dont know about 'dark' but i get ya flow easy.



that line has been played before lol aint nuttin new but you handled it well
overall - 6/10

thank you ayura i love honesty that was real to find a good side and the roomfrom improvment i like thaT twin.
215 and dark im always ready for any help people offer to help me elivate what suggestions you give i will incorporate

uppin

Ok, Ok, Any Of You In Here That Want A Shot - Join The LLL And Work Your Way Up To The Championship Like I had To!

Onto the piece, i dont think i aimed any hate at you or whatever, the piece wasnt bad, flow a little sketchy in parts but thats down to your 'flow shifts' punches were there, wordplay was pretty consistant, for real though - diss tracks are for newbies and were both really more Open-Mic orientated, so stop with this 'beef' and just do your thing man.
There's no hate here.

Pz!

NO DOUBT THE BEAF IS SQUASHED

yeah I liked the flow of this...I could comprehend the shifty flow cause a lot of timez I got shifts and pausez and my rhymez too...but...anywayz...nice drop...