Check In: Tuesday.

Verses: Thursday.

Alright, The Rules...

16-48 Line Limit...

No Bullshit...

Topic: Down Below

^o.k what was that, cos you got me confused..lol, yup i'm just tryin' to make up 100 charcters..^

Checkin in', Good luck A2z, You Get alotta Talent Dawg, This Should be Hard, UNlike My Last One - *Stares At Tone-E"!

yeah this'll be a whole lot of fun, win or lose this will be a challenge......check check check............................................. ...........

Down Below.

Down Below, A Land Thought To be Dead, Long Ago...
Although The Fact Is That It Reeks Of Evilly Intensified Glow...
Land Of The Crow, The Place Where Contemned Lives - Die Slow...
A Place Of Brimstone n’ Fire, A Place Where Criminals Retire...
How Do You Acquire This Unforgivable Place Of Death n’ Horror...
They Dream Of A Place, Higher, Where Flamethrowers Are For Hire...

John Led A Evil And Unforgivable Existence...
He Was Led To Believe To Resist Police Resistance...
His Social Security Provided Only A Bare Subsistence…
Animosity Against All Things Dignified n’ Noble…
His Presence Let Off More Pollution Than Chernobyl…
When He Was Young, He Knew His Evil n’ Charisma Would Be Global…

Our Story Begins, In A Small Country Town…
His First Victim Would Indecorously Drown…
John, Wanted To Lift The FBI’s Serial Crown…
Not Knowing When He Died, He Was Goin’ Down…
His Second Victim Was Murdered In A Slasher Attack…
His Body Was Only Recognized By His Yellow Teeth n’ Plaque…
Crack Was Not The Intent To Kill, Black Was The Reason He Was Put To The Drill…
His Third Victim Was Cooley Told To Chill…
Just Before He Let Out A Pitiful n’ Bloodcurdling Shrill…
He Was Buried So Brutally In The Back Yard…
His Once So Handsome Body Now Black n’ Horrifically Charred…

But Before Anther Innocent Life Could Die…
Special Agents From The FBI, Shot Him Before He Could Deny…
A Rather Sad Goodbye, From Someone Who Had The Inability To Cry…
But Now John, Had To Accept The After – Effect…
Wrecked In Confidence, Now His Soul Would Morally Correct…
It Will Take 1000 years Of Fire n’ Brimstone To Perfect…
Now He Resides A Land Thought To be Dead, Long Ago...
He Now Has Unwanted Accommodation Down Below….

Damn he stole my topic...ah well...

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A Place Of Myth And Legend...A Place None Knew To Exist
A Mystic Glow Set By The Triple 6 Laced With The Burning Crucifix
A Man Dies In A Knife Fight...Lived By His Money And Sweet Talking Lip
A Man Shrouded In Motral Sin...He Begins His Brimstone Trip
Its Over With, Not A Chance To Repent, No Dice For An Exorcist
A Dim Light Burns Away A Man's Life...The Very Soul Is Penetrated
A New Level Of Pain Is Generated...As An Evil Man Is Incinerated
Paying For What Hes Done, For How Many People Hes Lost Respect
For How Hes Was Too Cheap For Chairty, Now He Pays For It In His Flesh
Suddenly Hes Remembers Who He Loved, The Way He Used To Live
About All The Girls hes Had Sex With...All The Fatherless Kids
All The Child Support He Refused To Give...All The Girls He'd Hit

*Flash*

He Was In The Trailer, With His Girl...A Too Young Blonde Raising A Kid
She Was Angry At The World...One Way Or Other, He Didnt Give A Shit
But This Was It...She Had Spent Too Much Money, Too Little Left Of It
She Desperately Tried To Explain... He Wouldnt Listen, She Began To Plead
'Buying Shit She Dosent Need...Does She Thinks It Grows On Trees?'
'Shes Lieing, The Fucking Slut'...He Began To Twitch In Anger Restrained
He Grabbed A Bat, Raised It Up...

*Flash*
...He Was Back In His World Of Pain

A Tornado Of Screams...A Wall Of Fire In Capabale Of Breach
The Mourning Souls Strung Out On The Walls, Vieled In Fiery Wreaths
Skin Is Slowly Scalded Away...No Possibility Of Relief Or Escape
And There The Man Collapsed...Left To View The Smoking Landscape
And Left There For All Eternity...His Last Day Was His Judgement Day


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sorry i wasnt really feeling this topic...nice drop RT

..omg...this shit was so hard...especially yall both rapped about hell...damn..I'm going to have to go with A2Z..that flash back scene got it for me..that was dope...damn..good battle..

uppin for some votes.

this league is gettin' slept on....................

uppin for some votes.

very good both i think u guys could have made the storys a little longer i got hooked and then Poof the story was over..but still very good vocab usage and flow from A2z made the story clearer in my head not to take anything away from the other guy but he just edged it out on how the story was told.....


voteA2Z

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wow hot drops yall. RT i was feelin the wordplay in there, good stuff if u could see it. both of yall told stories and honestly i think A2Z had the better story. the flash was good i liked that. everything was there. flow, vocab, story telling.

vote=A2Z

I wanted to vote on this, to be an active member...
But this shit was seriously a tie to me.
They were both enjoyable, though different.
I tried.

Lemme say this, Rhythmic, you tryed, and I saw where you were going, and I didn't like it, It was unpredictable, but not in a good way, the end was unfulfilling, and I was like.....Ok, why should I care, you made us have no emotional connections with the people that died, unlike A2Z, who made us have apathy for the victim in his. Great verse A2Z, you took this to the next level.

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A2z Wins...

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Rythmic Tendicies Will Be 1-1 Next Week...
And A2Z Will Be A Hefty 2-0... he's Sexy..

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