ya whole squadron will get bombarded and crew-cified//
you ?cross? my line and i rip 7 shades outta ya insides//
refer me to as a holographic device the way ya rhymes fly-by//
Ayura blinds sights, deafens you blind mice//
hang you up by da beanstalks, squash with the giants might//
im the wolf in your hood, and im painting the town red//
my steep words got my codename: slaying commando mountain//
in street herds, its like cypha rebirths, enigma spitting fountain//
producing rays bouncing off walls, ricocheting like a bullet satan//
flesh blisters blazing, leviatating replicating a magician super saiyan//
electron voltron tracing the basis of fakers, liers, biters and haters//
taking place in submarine basements, radar systems whistling//
digital screen exposing positions, equipment specifically designed to eliminate you weaklings//
cerebrel dolphin navigation, telekinitics holding up your face- lift ://
like spirits from the bodies i diminish withing a tenth of a second//
from the weapons handed to me from the blessing of the deserts//
of astrological distance, words float weightless from this mystic//
throw propraganda in your ears, put the image in your vision//
under a minute under my wisdom, your brain will be blistered//
super computers registering a thousand hidden messages//
hidden between the pages of manuscripts, and my sentences//
reveal the answer my riddles, : Ayura - just - rules



ha, and beneath my name, its says 'new to RB'

nice flow
nice vocab
wordplay was good
good piece
keep droppin

This was pretty good, you can tell you prolly new to RB but not to writing, your vocab is your strongest assest here, not the fact that you using alot of words but the fact that they make sence. I get the feel that if this is not a keystyle type thing then you just typed this down right at the computer without pre-writting becasue it really has no common topic thru-out, but It's pretty good.

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thanx, for da topic, i decided not to do topics at da min untill my rank goes up a few places, otherwise people dont take you seriously, so imma do non-topics at da min.

uppin

uppin

Wurd...

...But i think it wouldn't harm to do topics cuz you'l still gettin the same amount as viewers...and wil get maybe better/more feedback doing topicals...hOlla

oNe

yea, still uppin dis peice though

uppin dis

ok good wordplay and vocab here,was there a topic though ?,it read quite well,this was a descent peice.

Peace