i feel lost as if my mind wanders aimlessly
painlessly flamed disdain fame shamelessly
i sulk languidly in the sunken shore of despair
beware of my mind's trap;..theres no love there
lost with no care but to be fair i've smothered my fair share
emotions tenderly coasting on this ocean of spiritual comotion
a "disasterpiece" masterfully clashes abstractly wit catastrophe
wrought with thoughts of homicidal demonic feelings
i hang hangnooses from the ceiling willing to commit this killing

but it is what it is shit will never change
ganbangas bang hustlas still slang
the drug infliuence makes everything seem strange
played pain as love and still lost the fucking game

'say my name say my name' prophiit ain't shit to the game
slay lines wit strays and still overshadowed by ak's
my main focus is deranged plain and possibly insane
i sprain tongues wit the way these flows are arranged
spiritually ordained ordinarly precise each thought concise
bright lights mimic mentioned sentences to fright
tonight is your night. watch how wet these words get
expect death at best when served this sacred text
ceartinly not the type you'd like to try or test

but it is what it is shit will never change
ganbangas bang hustlas still slang
the drug infliuence makes everything seem strange
played pain as love and still lost the fucking game

i play second fiddle to the piper gimme papers and a lighter
and i riddle any little bitch who thinks that they're a fighter
fantastic futuristic fanfare freezing fully focused flight
bright nights blinded sight shudders and escapes sight
horrendous potion wit no anitdote leaves silly niggas comatose
doses of dope and coke pours from my nose like boogers blown
well known on the drug scene not a dealer but a user
weed and tonic mixer..constant amphetamine abuser
so listen to my rendition of elated sedititous nutrition
as we journey on the path of righteousness god's expedition

but it is what it is shit will never change
ganbangas bang hustlas still slang
the drug infliuence makes everything seem strange
played pain as love and still lost the fucking game

uppin'

YO THIS WAS ILL AND POETIC IN CONCEPT AND CONTENT I LIKED THIS READ ALOT AND THE GRPGICNESS WAS SUPPERB TIGHT DROP TWIN PEEP MINES TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK

I like the alliteration of that line...the song was kinda spiritual ina way to...it soundz like it had some emotion behind it...I like the multiez you used in the 1st and last versez too...and that line about the piper was a ill ass multie display...

thanks to both of you.........uppin

uppin

uppin please don't sleep........................

uppin please give more feedback!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Prophit I must say that was an amazing display of artistic
expression.
11/10


PEACE~~~~~~~~>

hmm i think this did fall asleep
wake up.. wake up..

the flow was on point, good job
that alliteration pointed out before was very well done
the vocab was also on point

great drop
dont fall asleep again

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81616

yeah this was a pretty good peice, it was a good read, your flow was good through out the peice, your vocab was good i thought, and your content was good, overall id say it was a good peice, keep dropping.