They said it was the worst accident the hospital had ever seen/
They said that i could live on but I'd be silent like Bean/
That i would never get to talk never speak another word/
But what about the people who aint have my voice heard/
What about all the messages that wont be said/
They said what about the pavement that aint painted red/
What about your life that you get to keep on living/
And what about the joy your kid will get getting/
What joy could this guy be really serious/
Acting like he knows what im feeling although mysterious/
Are my real feelings cause i cant even speak no more/
My words cant get out of their house like there was no door/
There's no more verbs or adjectives that ill be sayin/
What about my friends now they cant say "man stop playin"/
Cause i wont be able to even crack a comedy/
But the doc is tellin me ill speak again soul solemly/
He promised me that once again i'd be in the booth/
Why did he lie to me why not just tell me the truth/
Tell me the real things that are going on/
That i really wont be able to have a beat that im flowing on/
He tried to explain to my wife my mouth will get better/
She couldn't take it wanted to leave..So i let her/
Just sat there in silence as he finished the procnosis/
Saying for a while my tougue will be in hypnosis/
So i wrote down how long did he think it would be/
He said "In a few months just be glad that you can see"/
I then wrote what is it im looking at/
Then he pointed at my wife as she gloomly sat/
Hugging my child trying to explain the pain/
That im feeling inside i cant walk through this rain/
I can not take this pain not being able to speak/
Cut short on my journey not hitting my peak/
Not hitting my height just cut short by an accident/
That left my throat and vocal cords slightly inwards bent/
I've now waited 3 years for my voice to come back so i can shock her/
But there was a complication with the surgery a mistake from the doctor/
Now the three months i had to wait becomes a lifetime/
So i turn to this tablet to express my life rhyme/

Heartfelt!Imagery was great.

u express alot of emotion.

Vocab was strong and structure was good!

I have to admit the beggining kinda suked but u made up 4 it in the end!

overall i give u a 7/10!Nice drop!

~KeEp~UpPiN~1luv~

Started off kind of basic and akward. That will put a few people off.

But you went on and wrote with a simplicity that kept the power at a constant level. Not too strong, but not weak either. Just there.

You kept focused throughout the piece on the topic at hand. Not straying all that much.

It held strong and well overall. The slight personal touch (though at times it was here and there) and hints of depth of lines made it a nice piece for what it was.

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