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Old 09-02-03, 05:06 PM   #1
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Topic- Lack of confidence

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Are we strong minded enough to print our moral issues?,
If people are grinded with themself they won't want tissues /
Yes...our body is imperative to our confidence inside of us,
It's inside of us but will be dominant not making anyting plus/
No trust with areself...What?...we can't rely on ourselfs,
Lack self respect we are prisoner of our own body cells/
Un-able to impel our lifes but manage too watch it diminish,
Never started a reputation but that creation is finsih/
No privellages in your ways cuz you are blockin your path,
Not attempting but accepting your always gonna come last/
Will his life go fast? there is no life so how can you measure,
The preasure one feels when all attempts failed at pleasure/
How can it get better if they trully believe there are worthless?,
Spirits like moutains unable to be lifted and the worlds surpluss/
Don't even cuss because this is there life and now noramal,
For them...They have no hopes but the future just sprawls/

What is it like for people with no self esteem

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Old 09-02-03, 05:16 PM   #2
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Easily one of the better pieces posted in this forum this week, nice topic and you portraid it well, flow was on-point throughout, great story telling ability shown, good word choice, a little on the short side, id probably of gotten into it more if you'd of extended it, but this was nicely written, finish rounded it off nicely, Props to you my girl!

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Old 09-02-03, 05:18 PM   #3
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Good shit. This piece was easily one of the best I've read in a while.Good good shit.This actually...astonished me. A very good use of words.
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Old 09-02-03, 05:24 PM   #4
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^^Werd Nice aNb.....Drop:P, .....real nice piece..........nice wordply, vocab..good flow....concept was nice....props...
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Old 09-02-03, 06:38 PM   #5
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Don't tell me theres alot of gays
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Old 09-02-03, 10:29 PM   #6
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good stuff,jus wanted more,a entire song woulda been nice,flow was there,vocan was descent,wordplay was descent,imagery was there,so good stuff.

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Old 09-03-03, 02:49 AM   #7
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Nice piece.........
I felt the flow and ur use of vocab and multis was good..........
Keep up the good work.............

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