Felt you needed to end your life so death was brung/
Silenced to the world your lyrics will never be sung/
Ended it all jumped right off the end of the earth/
Without the experience no seed no baby for birth/
No one to carry on ur legacy you finished it off/
Thought you could carry the pain found out ur heart was too soft/
Gone now no words can ever express it/
Handed your life to god..And he blessed it/
Remembered always is how you ended it all/
Not with a scream of fear..But the sound of a fall/

I hope this does justice to the life you led. Your always remembered.

I wonder why no one responded to this. It's not bad. I liked reading it. A pretty simple writing but well done. I don't really know what else to say about it. Keep posting more up.

it seems as if u cut yourself off before u really got that thing off your chest but wut u wrote is felt i hope u cope well, i like the piece, 1luv.

I dont want to critique this peice, the subject is obviousy very personal... I just want to say- its beautiful.

Handed your life to god..And he blessed it/

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much respected, this was beautiful... it definitely touched me.
Sad to hear bout your friend passing away, I'm sure he/she must have meant the world to ya. Hope you cope well

1 Luv

tight piece,nice all around,keep droppin.~1~

Pure emotions depicted through a simple 'template' as such. Short and unrelenting. A personal piece.

Felt and appreciated.

...resp....

Yeah i know how you feel exactly, i just lost my friend recently and its been hard coming to terms with not having him around, it was an inspiring piece and i liked it, keep it up, i felt though that it ended to short.

Next time try to make it longer.

peace and love

definitly respected man..good drop..i was feelin that...i liked ya lines but that soft one i think you dhould have shortened it made the flow fall..all in all great drop..peace..chekc my 2 later

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Good peice. It made me think and feel. All respect peace