audible:

My babies gone now…gone forever//
Ill never have her…to love and treasure//
To share the good times…and the bad times//
Im writin sick Rhymes…mixed with sad lines//
Theres nothing I can do to change it…its just the way she feels//
Ill have to make it easy and end it…or find a way to deal//
But you know im lazy shit…and my lif seems twisted and kinda end-less//
Fuck it ill pay my dues to god then imma grab my strap and try’n end-this//
Cause I really have nothing to live for//
Well brian but ill talk to him in heaven…over and out main man 10-4//
Damn I wish bin laden would have blown my ass up with him//
I can just hear danI now.. "I never really loved him…but imma miss-him"
That’s all no more attention…no more emotional tension//
You see what I mean? this bitch was so evil to me//
But I love her with all my heart and I DON’T CHANGE SO QUICKLY//
This girl was so quick to wiggle free its kinda sickening//
But life is about happiness and im not happy so whats the point of being here?//
What to see and hear? All her bull shit that leaves me with ringing ears//
I already talked to god and he has my place in heaven when I want to come//
Shit how about now…hurry up slut I want my gun//

King of Thievez...

if you ain't livin' to the fullest...what's the point-of-ya-life??????

I feel like puttin' all the bullshit in my heart under the point-of-a-knife//

daily appointments-with-strife...not like I've never felt-it-before//

but Forest Gump was right...my life'z like a box of chocolates...

as you drop-it... and it slowly starts to melt-on-the-floor//

I can't speak of the emotionz I feel...I believe that's what a felt-tip-is-for//

all that remainz of me is now a skeletal-corpse//

when I speak it's like you can't help-but-ignore//

neverthemore... I've endeavered beyond the deepness of ya heart that most will never-explore...

now gimme-the-gun...I'll fight to the death cause it was never in-me-to-run//

send-me-to-nuns I'll give you the gun-back if I can hear the gun-clap and you can end-me-here-son...

look in my bedroom and you can see my will-on-the-shelf//

now shoot me now nigga...or I'ma puller the trigga and be killin'-myself...



I think this was all off the dome...I know my verse was at least and I'm pretty sure audible'z was too...

both came ill for king the box of chaocolates can be fixed up other then that both were pretty much flawless consistant gave reason then conclusions to how your going to react relative emotions and thought very well done.

^^^thanks for the feedback Word...how ya think I can fix the box of chocolates line??????

thinken i didnt like it t first rereading it seams to make it fit more and more

KOT came doper, but I've got one thing to criticize;
DON'T put spaces between EVERY line -
It makes it a lot harder to read, and it seems longer.

Besides from that,
Good multies, good content and flow from you both..
But King of Thieves came doper in my opinion.



Nice collaberation.

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oh yeah...I didn't mean to put specez in there...it's just that audible sent me his verse through e-mail...and whenever I got done with a line it automatically spaced it...so I was lazy and was just like fuck it...so I left the spacez...lol