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New York,New York.
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Gotta love this place...
word.. The state of mind as we cruisin,different ethnic personalities Pass by lower Manhattan, Ground Zero:reminder of reality 9/11 has passed, its been 2 years since that date A date with the devil, a date that Death did Create We've slowly rebounded the United States is still weak though At the time we needed our mayor, he came,and helped spirits grow Then His term was up, his heroics were never forgotten Because I hear demons laugh, for every life thats lost when The fateful day occurred, our lives changed drastically But Ground Zero to us now, is a cold reminder of reality Chorus:New York, New York City We still here, and we ain't never left x4 Back on to the streets, nothin much has really changed Hip Hop is slowly returning, Blingin is gettin outta range New York City the only place that I would ever call home Because 9/11 happened when I was 2 years young,now im 2 years grown My state of mind has changed, I once thought we were Invincible One death is tragic, a million is a statistic, i learned that principle Loss of the life, is common now on these streets The place that I call home,a place where death will be Surrounded by an Aura, eyes are watching me But Word to all I love, I still love New York City The changes occured, now we've all gotten stronger The war in Iraq, can we hold on any longer? Chorus I wuestion our poverty, strife in welfare checks Picked up every week, our problems to regret Our power decreased, but they installing fear Because I get a feeling in my stomach,end of the year Will they attack us, our terror alert is too high Never noticed before, but now listen to each plane in the sky Some of you might no, but most have no idea We used to live calmly, but now our days are with fear We might live our last days, But that is in Jesus if we die tomorrow,our fear,is relieved of us. somethin simple, but i felt it had to be done. Word.
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that was pretty dope man.. the flow was good
the vocab wasnt dat nice.. could of came betta with that.. but other than dat i felt it ..keep postin |
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it was a good topic,structure was good,vocab was simple and predictable,other than that ill shit kid.~1~
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Your structure was very organized and flow was decent; the topic
was okay and you definitly did well with it . . Keep writing; i'll look out for your new open mics cheak mine out ..... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=78442 |
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yo that was a tight rhyme but you could of done more on chorus but it was dope.
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Upping this for my dawg
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I was feelin' that piece right there. You brought it home nicely on that last verse, your best flowing verse of the three, and that last bar was chilling, nice work man, props.
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i say way to rep ya city...........also tossed in some stuff about 9-11.....would have liked to see you expand a little bit.........plus i think maybe with the title and all you should have made every verse a different aspect of new york.........9-11 for the first verse...the different hoods there..........maybe something about it being the birthplace of hip hop etc.................there was good flow but i think you watered down your vocab to get your point across.........i think you should change around the chorus a little too..........instead of:::::
Chorus:New York, New York City We still here, and we ain't never left maybe:::::::: Chorus:New York City, New York We still here, and we ain't never left this was a pretty good piece all in all homie...........i see your skill as a topical writer keep doing ya thang...............1 |
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yes indeed...rep Ny to da fullest dunny...I like the topic...and the way that you rep the 718/212 with that WTC shit...
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Straight Savage.
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why do i get feedback on pieces i don't like.damn...
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Thatz coo but ya shit was hott i liked to finaly get some props on my home city ya herd?
the vocab was aight and the whole concept was together so keep it up cuzz aight Holla!
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Straight Savage.
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I really hate this piece.
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