Dont make me cry no more tears i dont want to be left alone
i want to stay in your arms for aslong as i can
I dont want to end up old and grey without soeone to hold
Please stay one more night so i can change your mind

It seems that ever since this man walked into y life
all i have been bombarded with is heartaches and lies
but i keep running back to him every second blink+
it seems my heart tells me things ma mind dare not think
You break down my barriers ive made over time
Make me feel like i can do anything, make me beleive you are mine
you show me my own reflections wen i dar not glance
everytime ive falterd down te road of life you gave me the second chance
now the police are nockin on the door asking where you were last night
when a realise that who i thougt was you is someone else, but my sould stll puts up a fight
even when i see you thru the bars in the cell i still beleive you are innocent
how can i be so fucking stupid, your guilty as sin, ave seen the evidence
some where in my heart a tell myself that everythings out to get me
but stll you stand there and touch ma face and fiction becomes reality
i will give everything and anything to have you here with me again
to have you hear my laughter, see the sky and share my pain
and for once blessed moment i realise the fatefull truth
that i would be nothing without you

whatr the fuck has this place become....NO ONE gives feedback..........this site is going DOWN

Nice drop girl....

Really feelin where you're comin from....My peices are like that too....sad love songs....But you gotta write what comes from the heart.....Keep it real!

Overall- 8/10

That's floetic, for real. Straight from the soul. I was feeling it. It's a real love song. It should be made into a song.

I like this. Anotha hit from Pledge. I enjoy ur drops a lot. Keep droppin more like this. Soon enough u'll be bigger than u r on tha net. I mean way bigger. We need more femcees like u nowadays and shit y'know. Im out. 1.

kinda short...but it was a very good verse...i was feelin the emotion, the way you made it come alive was good keep droppin one

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The Weathers Art
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My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

take no offense to this... but that sounded more like a poem than a verse... it was good though... the flow of it was definately on, and your concept was good... i liked it...
keep at it.
A.T.