yo its the iceman comin hard bouts to freeze the game/
nigga im all about the fame im great like MJ i belong in the HALL OF FAME/
nigga i slang cain and sell rocks/
i bust niggas domes they girls is on my cock they think they game cause the playin XBOX/
i decapate bodies and put um in rugs/
i dont shank niggas i hit em wit slugs have they body gettin raided by bugs/
my nigga im tryin to elevate and get my skills re vamped/
like lennox lewis im the heavyweight champ/
these dudes wanna battle cant last 1 round/
like roy jones im toughest pound fo pound/
niggas try to come at me wit yo momma punches that are faded/
iceman gonna freeze they rhymes and have em updated/

feedback would be very helpful holla back

uppin fo feedback

it was aiight
up yor vocab and u'll be alright
had a good flow
keep elevatin

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thanks krem

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uumm wut can i say....up your vocab...elavate some..it as a good drop but you cud'a made it longer an more topical...maybe have a hook..but all in all for a newbie...you did good keep droppin dawg..u got potential next time...read over..an drop summin wit flames...peace man

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well what can i say u need to expand your vocab and youll do good