10-12 Lines Max
All Rules Apply ..
Drop When You
Have A Verse Done

Cheak In ....

Cheak In Horse
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I'll Let My Verse Resemble A Mirror
So You Can Reflect On Your Whack Skill . .
I Rap Steel, I Throw Punches Towards
Your Spine So Even I Get The Chills . .
Im Taking You Spot Light And
Leaving You All Alone In The Cold Dark . .
His Raps Come From His Spirit
Well I'll Leave Your Ass On A Soul Fart . . (BrainFart Duh!)
You Need To Scream To Get Attention
Pale's Voice Was 'Horse' For This Match
His Spits Are Whack, He Rappin From His Ass
Maybe It Would Be Better If His Brain Wasnt Attached . .

Good Luck ...

There's My Verse For You If You Show Up ......

Dang, Gimmick this is really gonna suck
I broke that verse that resembled a mirror and got 7yrs. bad luck
You little punk spitten junk like "There's My Verse For You If You Show Up"
Battling you, son, I have no objection
In fact Im'a make this quick like death by leathal Injection
Hows that for a "reflection on my whack skill"
cause your rhymes aint producing like a chick on the pill.
Your sitting in your chair wondering what will he say next,
will he talk about how I am a 13 year old boy with female sized breasts.
Alright there Gimick, I am bringing this to a close,
I wont tell anyone your secret about the time you wore your moms cloths.

Haha Okay, You Feeded + Used A Mirror
Line Which You Got The Idea From My
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Ummm good newb battle gimmick won this won better voc not too many punches but his shit was a lil stronger elevate yall

Dang, Gimmick this is really gonna suck
I broke that verse that resembled a mirror and got 7yrs. bad luck
You little punk spitten junk like "There's My Verse For You If You Show Up"
Battling you, son, I have no objection
In fact Im'a make this quick like death by leathal Injection
Hows that for a "reflection on my whack skill"
cause your rhymes aint producing like a chick on the pill.
Your sitting in your chair wondering what will he say next,
will he talk about how I am a 13 year old boy with female sized breasts.
Alright there Gimick, I am bringing this to a close,
I wont tell anyone your secret about the time you wore your moms cloths.

Gimmick that mirror line was a flip on your script dawg, not a stolen idea----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

But where he says "all rules" in the first post...

Maybe you didn't know...

But that usually means...

No feeding
No flipping
No hate votes
No crew votes
No dick ridin

So, there ya go...

Anyway...
Back to the battle...

Aside from the flipping, this was ok.

I loved the opening line Gimmick came with, spooky like.

Pale, ya had nothing too original but nothing too shitty either.

Alot of filler though.
Try and make each line a diss.
Especially in a short battle.
You don't have time for build up lines like...
"Dang, Gimmick this is really gonna suck"
And
"Battling you, son, I have no objection"
And
"Your sitting in your chair wondering what will he say next"
And
"Alright there Gimick, I am bringing this to a close"

See, no punches in those...
If ya check Gimmick's verse...
He hit ya with almost every single line.

There ya go, man.

Just hit more often and you'll get better.

Peace

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Thanx 4 da advice B2K,

guess thats why I am a newbee
But still I did hit him harder--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

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