Well i do feel like spittin, can you handle what i write
for instance, can you handle barking dogs, late at night
barking louder and louder, when you're trying to sleep
don't act a coward cus cowards, get sent six-feet-deep
i can handle defeat, but i don't like to lose at all
in battle with me, you should brace yourself for a hard fall
keep your homies on call, cus when i brawl, in that next level
every outsider, wets ther drawls, so just snap your pencil
cus it's not even worth your time, writing out petty rhymes
like your lookin for cash, and all you find are a few dimes
it'll just be a waste of my time, so if you step here's a warning
i'll serve in the late night, day time, or top of-the-morning
like you want to test the lane but standing in your way
is, Alonzo Mourning, if you're lucky you'll succeed in dunking
however, you better be jumping right off a mini trampoline
be left bloodied like tampons that haven't been cleaned
i'm verbally mean, also obscene, when i approach the scene
i will accept the fact, you'll attack but, i'll still stay serene
cus if i lose to you, i'll just take it out on the MC after you
cus blastin fools, with words is right now, what i choose to do//

good verse, i liked the flow...topic was cool...seemed to me you shud'a saved that for a battle it was good, i liked it good droppin man peace check my shiz out 1

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I checked your keystyle a few days ago, i liked it, i'll try and check your flows out when i see'em. Thanx for checkin this out.

Yeah, good drop right here and thick on the vocab so good there too. I like the flow and I can picture this on a beat, so points there. Pretty damn good man. Keep droppin...

Hit up my shits if you get the time...

Laaate.

keep your homies on call, cus when i brawl, in that next level
every outsider, wets ther drawls, so just snap your pencil

loved that line..
like those above me say.. this wa a good drop.. i found the flow, the rhyme scheme was simple yet effective. I suggest try and get like 1 more rhyme per bar in... an internal rhyme scheme would make this off the hook... it could have been a great battle if you worked in a few more punches... the vocab and its use was good 2...

stay up

I liked it

nice flow, verry good concept

yo thanx ya'll, appreciate the feedback.

Well i do feel like spittin, can you handle what i write
for instance, can you handle barking dogs, late at night
barking louder and louder, when you're trying to sleep
don't act a coward cus cowards, get sent six-feet-deep
i can handle defeat, but i don't like to lose at all
in battle with me, you should brace yourself for a hard fall


this was aight, you tried to keep consistency in the structure, it fell abit, but you got it back in places, flowed aight,

the content was soso, this is the area you need to improve, try and increase the vocab you use to rhyme with, but don't over complicate it, good solid drop, keep it up and you will get good...

PEEP MY SPIT "LET LOOSE" FOR RETURN OF FAVOUR....

i was definetly feelin the topic, i thought u carried it out through the verse pretty damn good. the vocab was kool, the wordplay was nice, just keep elevatin and postin dude ur doin good.