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Old 09-10-03, 11:22 PM   #1
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Clapping One Hand

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I bang my head against the wall, like my brain is pinin
My mind like a staple, but I'm just not grinnin
But everyone else was, is, has been, and will be
Because I'm just a loser and my peers call me a bad seed
And on that day, I wondered why I took this shame
Cuz I've been hit with more blocks then a Tetris game
The late bell rung, everything turned into slow motion
And my thoughts ran like a tiny ocean
I went into the class room, where my torment was best
Ripped open the door and kicked over the front desk
Reached into my jacket and capped the teacher in her face
She put me on front seat, now I put her in her place
Turned around and popped everyone whereing letter jackets
I even killed the only person that wasn't laughin..
..when they made fun of my dad for being a bum
..or when they saw the needle tracks on my mom
Now watch it blow up in their face, I only saw red
Like a madidore before the bull severes his head
Two bullets left, this last girl cried hysterically
Until I pulled the trigger, and split her wig like kemotherapy
The deed was done now came the icing on the cap
Turned the gun on myself and heard one hand clap.....*POW*
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Old 09-10-03, 11:39 PM   #2
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damn nice verse, it was entertaining, i liked that line about you gettin hit with more blocks then Tetris.

'I went into the class room, where my torment was best
Ripped open the door and kicked over the front desk'

nice.
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Old 09-11-03, 12:17 AM   #3
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Thanks partna. I'll peep your's tomorrow. Off to bed right now. Pz.
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Old 09-11-03, 12:36 AM   #4
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Hey man good shit here. I like how the title came around at the end. I was like WTF can this be about and then I read the drop, so good shit right there. Good imagery with this and I could picture some dingy ass classroom with desks overturned and shit. Anyway, keep droppin and I'll keep an eye out. Good drop.

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Old 09-11-03, 02:35 PM   #5
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Hahaha, Just Seen This One. .

Not a bad job my man, flow was as downpacked as it gets, a few good quoteable lines in this piece, the blocks / tetris seems to of caught their attention but i liked this one more:

Reached into my jacket and capped the teacher in her face
She put me on front seat, now I put her in her place
^ lol, i just thought that was worded nicely, rolled off the tongue pretty well and gave me a slight chuckle, also the 'kemotherapy' line caught my eye as i read it. = )
All in all a decent piece, flow and subtle wordplay were its strong points, could of used more multi's and internals in there to strengthen it a little more, but im just being picky, i really liked this actually, made for a good read, short and straight to the point.

Props. = )
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Old 09-11-03, 05:29 PM   #6
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Word up Cam. Just getting back into the fray of topicals.
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Old 09-11-03, 11:49 PM   #7
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Uppin. Stop sleeping you whores.
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Old 09-11-03, 11:53 PM   #8
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Hit my Open Mic up titled "One verse..." and I'll return the favor.
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Old 09-12-03, 12:05 AM   #9
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How about. . . no.
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Old 09-12-03, 12:09 AM   #10
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Whoddie.. Nigga Whats!

Yea Good verse-age, Even Thought Its A Key..
You Never Fell Off Dude.. Cuz YOU WERE NEVER ON...
^Lol J/p .. You Be Dope And I Enjoy Reading The Shiz..
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Old 09-12-03, 03:41 AM   #11
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I agree with the rest of these fags......this is a hot piece...nice flow...good topic...dope shit...I like the title too...Clapping One Hand...that shit is hot...as soon as I seen that title I just had to check this piece out...lol...
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Old 09-12-03, 11:36 PM   #12
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Thanks. Spinal Food. Lets get a few more people to reply and then I'll let this one hit the bottom.
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Old 09-13-03, 03:02 AM   #13
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i was feelin it. the vocab was kool, and the flow kicked ass. i was definetly feelin the line bout tetris. i also was feelin how the title came out in the end. good shit.
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