Version of some peoples first date:

Strol up to the door, knock 1..2..3..4, hearing a creak, must be the floor/
Your date walks in looking hot, your ass porbably wondering where is the G-Spot/
Your first date and your already thinkin bout fuckin, or you could do with a good suckin/
Take her to your 1995 Ford, she bends down to get in the car, ass shakin, OH LORD!!/
Drivin to the school dance, thinkin afterwords you got some time for romace/
You start danceing and she grinding on you balls, throats scratchy, reach for halls/
Pop it into your mouth and start bittin, but your mind starts wondering to rhyme writtin/
She walks over and grabs your dick, it's starts to grow and get hard, like a stick/
Walk back out to the car and get in the back seat, take it out so she can see that meat/
She strips down to her thong and nothing else, heart beating faster, unhealthy pulse/
She deepthroats you as you moan, she goes all the way down and you grown/
She fingerin herslef getting ready for indertion, some little kid peeks in, pervertion/
She stops she turns around, you stick it in her pussy actin like a hound/
Start pumping with maxium thrust, think doing this is an everyday must/
Stop and cum all over her face, she licks it up like it should be a race/
You turn around do see a picture of the football team, "FUCK"m it was only a dream/


Yeah that shit would suck so badly if that happened.

this is tight, it is an every day thing down here in vegas. Keep hits like this one posting.

Thanks for the feedback dude, I really appreciate it.

Uppin for some more feedback, tell me what you think people, tell me what I need to improve on.

ye that wud suck lol pretty good open mic...try an get some simalies an metas though man but it was good i liked the flow...tight drop check myn "different teritorial flow" 1

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nigga that would suck id be pissed off. good flow my nigga that was off the chain

i thought that shit was awesome, that would fuckin suck, but anyway the vocab was good, so was the wordplay, overall id rate it a 7.5-8/10. keep postin and elevatin dude.