A clear view on the shit i do, im responcible for killen the unaceptable..kill you an eat yo beef call me the canable..new an aproved summin you cant quite handle...

Unapreciative to the slavage to the pages tryn'a become a genius..but its like i juz get caught up an vomite bolemic spits..
flow comen out my mouth like my brain has the shits.

Rap villin...rhyme killin..comen up wit a new flow..i hope yah feelin the grow..butcha aint my dick aint inplanted in ya asshole so why you screaming no dont make sence like gays watchin girls use dildos

a clear vision...no restrictions...im doing this on my own ambitions..to make scream four..knockin on your door...wit a knife to slice you up right..put a blade into your wind pipe

is there any way this aint gunna delay..to make a demo an actually have them put it in an have em press play..no they aint got no time 4 underground rappers these days

i gotta clear view on half these rappers inpulse..the way they act is normally all false..crucial believen half these clowns aint concieded..or are they gay ass kissin so they can be dick beaten
an better treaten?

MurDerous mind..fallen on you so hard think i was a big pine..spitten shit so heavy cud rearange ur spine...split right in half..diss me an -u- 6 feet unferground be the aftermath...

some kids i no dick ride so they can stand on two feet..then mouth off the wrong guy cuz hes suposibly a skid an get there ass beat..happens wen you gotta empty cup..an the shit you say you cant back it up

a lose cannan shooten a meta-plus 4-more sylabals then what you can buy in'a baby store (those little kid things to spell words on the fridge an stuff)..hotter then earths core..the centre of my spit i havent even been there before..juz like soap an your fuckin poors..

But im done shooten shit that dont mean nuttin..i aint full golfen im juz mini putten..a massive title wave..you can always see me comen...better hold your *breath* start runnin..no tellin..how much under toe i have *left*


*yo can ye all hit me up wit some feed back im trying something different..see if you can catch the flow beter an work on my metas an shit...thanks ye all uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

c'mon ye all dont sleep...uppen this for some comments...i no i can get sommin for somebody like damn..uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

This was a tight flowing peice, vocab was there balblahblah

..but i felt you could of put a bit more meaning into your lines maybe not forcing so many rhymes...but it was still a nice read

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dude i was lovin the flow here, more so then anything else in there the flow was on point.

^^im wit him, the flow was definetly on point, the vocab was pretty good, the wordplay was aight, and overall the shit was good. keep elevatin and postin dude

thanks ye all...uppen for more comments peace

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461

very nice rule, as usualy
the flow was tight
vovab was good,
wordplay was good

overall, very good piece dawg
keep droppin

i was impressed by the verse. but who are u dissin

hey thanks for the feedback everyone..C-C i wasnt dissing anybody..i was trying to work my flow an multies...im trying to elavate an get a good flow an mutlties so people enjoy the writting more..thats why i named it *different teritorial flow* thats all man but thanks uppen

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Open Mics
The Weathers Art
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=108673
My Teenage Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=104850
Secluded
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...851#post1148851
Open Your Eyes
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...461#post1157461