okay I posted some of this earlier but this is the revised version with a new verse... oooo

Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

Set It Up … Show All These People What It’s Like To Be You

Sometimes You Come Out Of Life On Top
Other Times You Feel Like Life Just Wont Stop
Saw My Life Through Others And Felt It Wasn’t Worth Saving
Few Weeks Back Had The Life Everyone Was Craving
Then The World Started Bugging And Shit Hit The Fan
Not Like Last Time Where I Saw My Problems And Ran
Gonna Stand Up And Take This Shit Like A Man
You Just Don’t Know How Long The Days Seem
Life Aint Worth Living, It Seems Just 2 Crazy
Man Even My Dog Was Right There To Play Me
Come On Bro, Im Looking Now Take The Knife
Is Shit Worth Staying.. Whats The Reason To My Life

Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

Throw The Punchs At Those Fake Ass Players In The Game…

Fake Friends Try To Make Amends
See Right Through Their Shit
Already Been Through This Bit
Just A New Cast To Reflect The Past
Seems Like Lifes Moving Just To Fast
Just Waiting TO Beat The Feeling Out Of The Past
Should I Just Wait And Tempt Fate
Or Should I Take The Detour To Ignore The Debate
Living Through All This Pain And Disdain
Who Am I Supposed to Blame
When All The Characters Seem The Same
Should I Take My Pain Out On The Game
Cock The 9 Back Don’t Force Me To Attack
Load Up The Mack… Say You Want To Stab Me In The Back
Get Back At Everyone For Their Overdues
Leave This Shit All Over The News
Wanna Fuck With Me Now ?

Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

What About That Girl… Uhhhh Whats Her Name…

Quit Playing I Know What Your Saying
What You Say It Just Aint Weighing…
You Said We’d Be Bonnie And Clyde Was There Something I Was Missing
Called You When I Was Feeling Blue
Thought That I Would Actually Feel For You
Then Just Like The Leaves I Was Out For The Winter
Removing You From My Life Is Like Taking Out A Splinter
I Was Forced To Remove Her From The Picture Like A Long Lost Revision
This Aint Math But I’m Always Up For Division
But In This Life I Shall Give You One Last Chance
Give Me A Call Then We Can Subtract Those Pants
Heres Your Last Chance To Get On Your Knees
Not To Beg For Forgiveness But To Suck On These

Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

Where Do You See Yourself In 5 Years…?

[Speaking]
Never Thought A Kid Out Of Canada Would Of Bloomed
Call Me What You Want But A Star Is What I’m Assumed

Boy Out Of Calgary Just Read My Bio And See What I Became
No Need 2 Speak My Name Til You Can Even Test My Game
Rest My Fame In This Rap Game Cuz I Was Finished Even Before I Started
Must Be The Verbal Moses Way I Leave The Rap Game Parted
Don’t Even Need To Throw Buck Shots, To Assume The Top Spot
Flying Down The HighWay Living My Way In The Drop Top
And My Game Just Don’t Stop With The Pedal To Ground
Pumping That Def Sound, Blazing Through Life Hell Bound
This Kid Is Renowned And Profound Leaving The Rest Unsound
So Many Jewels Hanging Around My Neck Swear I Should Be Crowned

Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

Like 2 Pac Its Just Me Against The World
Always Ducking The Shit Thats Hurled
Born Wit A Pair Of Boxing Gloves
Like It Was A Message Sent From Above

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yo... this wasnt a bad peice... you really put some emotion into it, I was feelin it...
you had a basic rhyme scheme... you could have made this a better peice if you made it more comlex...
but your vocab was good and your shit was flowin...
your hook was ok too... so all in all, it was a decent spit...
keep droppin and elevatin homie,
A.T.

checkk my drop called "whats yo deal girl??? (keystyle)"

uppin this to get some more feedback

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.: Uppin This Mother :.

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COMPLEXITY ALWAYS ADVANCES A TRAK BUT IN THIS CASE I DIFFER FROM MY COUNTERPART I THINK YOU EXZIBITED MORE CLERITY USING YOUR FORMAT AND WORD CONTEXT.
no doubt it has some rough edges but all songs do there is no perfection only elivation.you had a real good peace here and i look forward to reading more.

that was an ok piece nottin really stood out but it was still pretty hot good drop

Up For Some More Feedback

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yo man nice piece. real basic wordplay and rhyme scheme but it had real nice flow and i was feelin it. so all in all it was a good piece and keep dropin man. peace

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thats one of the best iv ever seen on these boards and in any other. i could accually get a beat in my head and put it to ur shit. i think that has potential and so do u

thanks alot man, not alot of time do you get a comment like that ^^

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yo lets up this to get some more feedback

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