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Old 09-18-03, 01:43 AM   #1
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The Originated(another Omen From The Omens)

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First things first....... where should I begin.
Most kids clone themselves on microphone like Siamese twins.
That aint raps’ origin-you aint original.
you stealing the real fans attention maken you a lyrical criminal.
wouldnt know a peace if you were GHANDI-
but Call yourself A~CROSS between GODLY or JON GODY-man listen!
if Your all that why you get protested by a MOB of CHRISTIANS.
Im dissmissen fire and dissen with no missen-
meaning my murderous mission- is to chop half ass m.c.’s like fractional division.

Try to invision-engaging in war and being married to a blood bath-
Your left side is pussy and ass... the right is a bitch...what left? you callen your girl your better half.

When I drop math- kids drop class-PIMP slap you 70's raps so you catch the SHAFT.
I put nothing in FRONT of me you kids ride AFT-so you cant copy my shit but still can PASS getting GASSED.
That aint your WORD IS BORN that shits ADOPTED-
Kid~napped cause a grown man wouldn’t of copped it.
You aint at my level of the game... not at my stage-The way I sun you will be the dawn of a new age.
Im ahead of you by light years-you rap quers-
so quick to ride the dick my condomns will be endorsed by GOODYEAR.
This here, will show the world-my ass while flash dick to your girl-
I kill every thing I apply~ in~ plural-9 to 5 with live battles that if you survive and walk away alive you’d only get A ~referral~.
IM UNDISPUTED-facen me...you get BLEMISHED and OXY~CUTED-
CENTZ is the virus try an download it and my verses cause computers to be rebooted.
I got the game SOWN like im FULLY SUITED -with an IQ SO HIGH im FULL ZOOTED.
Drop the fly SHIT and leave the world DEFICATED- the toilet earth is where I FLOW like im CONSTIPATED.
Im not saying im the best-that wont happen until the gun clappen puts me to death.
even when Im laid to rest-my tombstone would read "fuck you" to all those that slept.
dreamt-of becoming me- but first dream of being a minimal talent m.c._ than attempt-
acting like you keeping it true-the only way you sample my adlibs is if it were, one of me killing you.
Exhaust a molitof when I cough- the lord of the mic at my funeral they’ll say god we give you CENTZ try not to piss him off.
And if that don’t compute im telling you cats you just Microsoft.
so here's my dick atlest physically you can jerk me off.

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Old 09-18-03, 01:54 AM   #2
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hmmm where do i start...

this was good but i expecter more from you... the flow was hard as hell to find. the vocab was there but it looked more forced than anything. Dont get me wrong this isnt bad its just im getting deep with my feedback cause your suppose to teach me how to open mic.

You aint at my level of the game you aint even at my stage-The way I sun you will be the dawn of a new age.
Im ahead of you by light years-you rap quers-

^^fav lines... the wordplay was good and this seemed alot better suited to be in a battle...take that how you want... and if u dont like what i said hit me back just as hard on my ONLY open mic to date

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Old 09-18-03, 02:06 AM   #3
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i'd say that was one of the best verses i've read in my short time on this forum. Your wordplay is sick, it had good meta's and i'd say you just fuckin ripped that shit, nuff said.
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Old 09-18-03, 02:09 AM   #4
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Reppin the omens to the fullest with that spit word...
your word play was ill as fuck and your vocab was def. there.
your structure was off, but yo, this verse was flowin...
i liked this peice... keep at it nikka,
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Old 09-18-03, 02:13 AM   #5
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thnaks twin and i will try harder next time to smoothen it out nothing was forced here i guess maybe i tried for a dif styke then my usual maybe the original formula is what i needed
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Old 09-18-03, 02:16 AM   #6
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Yeah it sounded though a few bars were forced this was an allright drop flow could be worked on and i have lliked some of ure older stuff better..........keep spitten

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Old 09-18-03, 02:37 AM   #7
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you reppin' the fam like you carry my last name...lol...damn that's a dope simile...I gotta write that...
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Old 09-18-03, 02:56 AM   #8
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thnks twin the verse has bee edited now i hope you enjoy it better and it comes clearere than before.
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Old 09-18-03, 09:40 AM   #9
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Old 09-18-03, 12:29 PM   #10
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