20 lines max , no feeding , hating , crew votes , dr , recycling , biting , prewritten ...

I usually go 10 liners , but trying to elevate my program .... so Im gonna try and drop 20 , or 10 bars ......


check in , den get yer spit up in 45 min ....

Peace , CrazyE

***intro***
You think u raw? bitch i'll leave ya bodyframe Stitched wit Scars/
Cause Vomittin KitKats the only time this kid Sick wit Bars/
Get ripped apart, just Hand me the Crown, ya flows Second Rate like Hand me Downs/
Man I'll Shake Ya Block & Break Ya Ankles so u can't Stand Ya Ground/
Ask Around & they'll often respond wit, "You Ain't Fuckin Wit Shock/
Cause my bars'll End ya Career as a 1-Hit Wonder, Rushed in Retirement/
You Rhyme wit Basics, Yet u wack wit verbs & Slack wit Nouns/
I'll Rip Out Ya Spine & Toss It To The Canvas, bitch take the hint & BACK DOWN/

***outro***
I'm Clever wit Rhymes, i'd Cut you wit Personals but i ain't tryin to Severe ya Pride/
Cause you Envy my Pressence like Oxgyen, so Without me, you could Never Survive/

** the verse**
I doubt you'll land a punch but throw a Few-If-You-Dare/
Cuz The only time your"OUT-STANDING is when u Lose-In-Musical-Chairs/
This man is lost his mind, craz you've neva had a Fan-In-Ya-Life/
cuz "pussy, you're fake" like what's between a Mannequin's-Thighs/
Infactuated-and-Attached to 'Skeptics-Unmatched Unavailing-Attacks ur Failing-Dis-Match/
I'm Apeshit-Wit-An-Axe 'Abrasive-Thru-Facts' u can't SHAKE or FAZE me like a Narcoleptic-Hack/
I'm not the one to 'Beef-WIth' 'Believe-This' u not 'seein me' like Big-Foots-Fetus/
Chapters 'Adapted-2-A-Thesis' leavin ur 'DUdes-N-Pieces' now u & ur "fam in flames" like 'Gay-Nephews-&-Nieces'/
No Remorse and Fuck Pitty and u still 'CLaim-2-Be-Witty?' this Queer standin alone like Athiest Riots in 'Salt-Lake-City/
Even 'kids with tourettes wouldnt 'swear' He'S NiCe, now your So-Mad-At-Life with a Known-Habit-2-Bite/
Most-Crap-He-Recites' he's been here for AGES! but still wont 'Show-Talent-Wit-Mics.......

mybad thats 21
instead of 20

Imma pull the Brains out da top of yer-skullcap dopehead
Hard for yu to spit when yu chew' on my glock-Lead-N-ur-Dead

Make Plans for a funeral son , Cause Im a man who hits Targets
Like Jet-Li, Im da One , and yu just heading for the Tarpits

I'm gon' take yu out for a ride in da desert ,.. dont be Grovelling
Wen' we take a walk off the main road , yu'll be da one Shovelling

I'll bury yu with verbs and words to inches of ya neck
Shock be overhelmed by ma tricks and ma Niggerigged deck

Coming correct aint an option for me, its my chosen profession
Shocks spit still keepa Flopping , I've seen Zero- Progression

Amazingly yu managed a few wins on this site
But , like mama says , two wrongs dont make a (pre)"write"

Yu like a herb dat shows up at a gun-fight wid a-knife
Yu dat dumb , yu dont deserve the right for Life

Get strapped son , cause yu a wacked cunt , hollering jibberish
Don't need guns for yu , yu so weak , I'll strangle yu with Licorish

I'll stamp my bootprint on yer face , break bones and open space
replace ur nose , with a pose of me fucking hoes,an winning dis race

I dont need words to merk yu , when yu talk its hurts you'
Yer Spitting shit dat makes no sense , like a mute yelling "Fuck U"


Peace , CrazyE

Good verse, i like ya style its nice !!

anyways heres where the votes come

my aim: shockthaworld

either hit me up on aim and ill get at ya battle

or drop a link its that simple ....

Best opening line I heard in a long time, and shock just got sicker from there, for me, there was monly ever one mc in this.
CrazyE, don't get me wrong, you verse was ill. It was just second best in this battle

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Oh nah never that, thats not even me on that DR tip

people hit me up all damn day askin me2 vote on battles



so ya kno i dont mind doing them



i only give my honest vote, hope to return the same


VOTES ARE PEOPLES OPINIONS - sometimes people think different that you ya kno

no dick riding

Yo, i'ma break this battle down soon as y'all hit this up:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...3788#post783788
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I hit up ya battle, so return the favor

with a honest vote

lol so we dont think there is any dick riding goin on !!

[ battle ] prolley will get sleep'd on anyways its above 10 lines
newbs cant read!

lol.....tight close battle.............everything was even but shock had better punches and an overall better verse
no hate vote, just my opinion
vote=shock
fav. line: throw a few punches if you dare, youll nvr be outstanding unless you play musical chairs lol
hit up my battle vs saracen thx

Your battle has been Voted on...

feel free to drop a link and i'll get back to you

in the mean time drop a honest vote on this

thanks

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Metaphores - tie
Vocabulary - stw (more complex)
Punchlines - stw (harder hitting)
Wordplay - stw (better use of words)
Creativity - stw
Personals - neither (none used)
Structure - ce (nice and even)
Opener - stw (hot as hell)
Finisher - stw
Multies - ce
Flow - ce (shorter lines/kept in smooth)
Overall - stw (6-3)

Highlights
CrazyE:
-Amazingly yu managed a few wins on this site
But , like mama says , two wrongs dont make a (pre)"write"

ShockthaWorld:
-You think u raw? bitch i'll leave ya bodyframe Stitched wit Scars/
-I doubt you'll land a punch but throw a Few-If-You-Dare/
Cuz The only time your"OUT-STANDING is when u Lose-In-Musical-Chairs/
Cause Vomittin KitKats the only time this kid Sick wit Bars/

NO QUOTING, MAKE YOUR OWN OPINIONS TO VOTE OR IT WILL BE WITHDRAWN

-BROOKLYN

Upping , Not for Nothing , but honestly who the fuck drops their aim right after a battle , if this post doesnt sound like DR , Then Im out of line , and Im sorry but seriously .,...


"anyways heres where the votes come
my aim: shockthaworld
either hit me up on aim and ill get at ya battle
or drop a link its that simple ...."

WTF ?? , Heres where the votes come ?? ( Aim address ) "Hit me up on Aim .... Ill get at ya battle .....Drop a link , its that simple ?? , are you shitting me, if that isnt a classic case of "I'll pull down my pants , if you pull down yers ....?" den I dont know what is ..... Granted Im a little fucked up right now and may be out of line , and if so I apologize , but someone step up here and admit dat this shit sounds "fishy" ..... if anything ...WTF ?

CrazyE

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drop a vote here and i'll return tha favor
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=80443