This is a real freestyle... its on audio i was doin it in my garage battlin some cat.. HOLLA

yo yo yo yo,

Big T~why they gave u that Tag? its not cuz u G~
its cuz u 300 pounds~and u got the "Big Titty"/
even if was a clit u still couldnt rip me~
U thinkin u on crack~the whack i got u Trippy/

Now to this wanksta Lucky

If u wasnt so illerit~i'd write this on some paper~
couldnt read~if u was "Hooked On Phonics"~
bitch still dont know why he bought those "electronics"/
Dun kno how to operate~a fuckin Phone~
Click the buttons~wait yo fat ass fingers get in the way~I set the Tone/
Im still confused~that all these words u still havnet bruised~
like yo girl~you gon get abused~
Lucky~u got merked~go put on ur Played out Sean John~
While ur gone~turn off the Elton John...

Big T~nigga u so fat u sweat in the shower~
takes 2 hours~Never mind fuck it~u 2 be cowards/
Fuckin niggas given each other oral~
u'd prob ask me~but after dis quarell~
U not gon step foot outside/
Ur like 500 Pounds~just gained anotha 200~
Not my fault i grew up On Dis~
ill Clap dis bitch~smack his ho up~
By Ho I mean Mother~
Im Mexican and niggas Call me dey "Brother"~
ur Black~and niggas call u a whiteboy~
Fuckin Cracka~
u whacka~Den Vanilla Ice~and LiL Kim~Combined into one..
And Shorter too~
Reppin LKS~Coma Crew~
Black N Gold Too
HOLLLA

Lucky: LiL LoCo u a dick nigga

yea im hard and i stand tall/
sumfin u cant do~the tall part~u like 5'2 and u like 21
Now im doubtin if that pregnacy test was right-u cant be my son/
Lemme finish this~snatch yo gun~run~u cant catch me~
Fatass quit sweatin me...
Fake Ass G

Peace

Maybe you should've just recorded the freestyle, because it's nothing special on paper. Some of the lines didn't even rhyme, and seemed like you just added "'s for a fashion statement. .

umm kredit what s are u talking about

umm yeah... k wa right this didnt look all that well on paper.. i did manage to see the rhyming and the fact that u did this as a freestlye shows some skill...

it was just 2 simple.. sorry kid

if u dont like what i said hit me harder herehttp://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?s=&threadid=80529
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=80134

Meaning - the way I pronounce words, half the lines didn't rhyme very well together. . at all.

And the quotation marks just got in the way, they weren't necessary anywhere in the freestyle.

SERIOUSLY...NO JOKING
might it be an accent... hes from chicago, me nyc, u north carolina... i might pronounce words closer to how he does... follow me?

Yeah I feel you - but thing is. . I'm from up north too, I was born in Michigan. .

i didn't see the rhyme at all i think this is one of those things you have to hear......as a freestyle yo big ups for doing your thing....but as a battle your punches were played and you basically kept repeating the same thing over and over. you should try and be a little more witty, gangsta is probably more your style but its hard to win battles that way

i agree wit werd~smith i give u props for puttin in down but it wouldnt pass in a battle,i think you should up your multis,and vocab,and structure.other than that nice drop,probably better on audio,keep elevatin.~1~