...::Adversary::...
~ i'm xplosive-wit-techs, juss smokin-tha-rest..
i'll grab a nigga du-rag off and choke-him-2-death...((cough cough))
rap-ill, im an assasin, collect future dead prezidents 2 stack-bills wit elastics,
its drastic mezures wen i clap wit gats, until blood is spat-and-spills...
spit wit mi pen, holdin-alliance,i compose-wit-excitement, dispite this violence,
and i wont die even wen all 9 planets is in allignement...
mi style is killin cats!, let words roll off mi tounge..
travel wit velocity, and crack ya mutha fuckin ear-drums..
this'll become one mor premier from young kids tha appear-dumb...i fear nun..
but the tables-have-turned, burned stables' , cuz i'm able-2-learn,
returned-unstable-i-yearn 2 label crazy fables as simply words on paper named slurrs..
i gut sick weapons that blast i'll strap leather 2 ya face, and watch how long ya breath'll last...
u gagged wit flamable gas, surpassed ya throats air shafts,
and watch ya lungs collapse and contrast as i fuckin laugh at u wacks...~

...::chorus::...
imagine, deletin all the agony and greef we seek...
imagine, in so much pain u cant even speak...
imagine, stayin in tha fuckin streetz 4 weex...
it dont happen 2 me bcuz i defeat emcees...
X2 bcuz i defeat this grief... {imagine}



...::Adversary::...
~juss invision me writin written schisms imprisoned wit different types of siblings...
inscriptions on walls that mark anotha mans missions...
i'm the definition, of the mind-set adversary,
the pads r ready, 4 combat, i'm mad-but-steady,
u'll get gagged temporarily if its necesary then we definetly gut fags 2 bury...
ur gunna take the cards the playaz delt,
tryin 2 escape? layers and layers of scars cuz sex and labor sells...
its hard wen u strapped wit fuckin conveyer belts...
to raiz hell, i'm sendin clips thru ya jaw, to shatter glass'...
scattered several masses of matter 2 splatter ya ass...
patterns of brass, rather than rolls of quarters 2 batter the staff....
soakin ya matress wit flamable gases, canasters of ashes...
mix it all 2getha and lite it wit lysol, acid and matches,
all while i laugh at u bastids ((ha ha))...~

holla bak!

This made absolute no sense... no offence... But your vocabulary was out of the dictionary..

u juss dont understand it.

I think you should buy "Hooked on Phonics."

You really need to improve your writing.

Let me help you..

"You just don't understand it."

There you go..

shut tha hell up, and stop talkin 2 me,
i dont have time 4 wak newbies (2 tha game) like u.
fucin bitch, u juss mad cuz i'm better than u

ithink he is just using the words in a different flow than other emcees.

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It doesnt matter if you win as long as you give everything in your heart

- michael jordan

I am gonna be what i wanna be, but not just what i wanna be but what i am.

- 2hot2handle(myself)

i thought this was decent, should make a better audio than text because audios seem to have a different type of flow to them, lol at the doo rag line, you must be pretty good to pull that one off properly, flowed pretty simple for me, multi's and internals helped with that, topic could of been chosen better, but this is what kids seem to feel in audio nowadays, so good luck with it man.

Peace!

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^^thank u^^
2 both of ya'll
imma post the audio up sumtime this weeks.
mor feedbac plz

I have to agree with cam. I thought this was a decent peice and definetly would make a better audio then text. but there is one thing. I couldn't really get at what u were rapping about. Like I can't really tell if ur like mad at the world or mad at life or just throwin some shit out I dunno but other then that ur vocab is good, u had a more then decent rhyme scheme and the whole thing flowed nice. so keep it up and next time try to rap about a certain topic and stay with it. no offence or nuttin just giving a suggestion.

and by the way. check out mine and masta C's open mic called "life is what we hate (ft. Masta C)" and also keep an eye out for our newest open mic which I will be postin sometime today called "High Times" which will also be featuring masta C and remember to leave some feedback. thanx in advance. peace.

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good look man,
i juss felt like spittin on like life,
like everything mostly "killin u" and how ill i am
imma peep that verse now gene pool

aigh't thanx man and I also posted up the high times collab with me and masta C to so go check it if u want.

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Pretty tight, shit wasn't big on concept or nothing... but still, you kept it intersting... specially with your wordplay, I was feeling that the most, shit had pretty good flow... was aight on vocab... notin special... lol...
shit had good multies... shit, I'll try to check this out when you post the audio... I liked it...

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I replied to this, return the favour: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=80973

Saves sleeping.

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^ Word to Cam, he put this best. Your flow was decent and i can defintly see this coming out way better in Audio. Also if your gonna do text, work on your structure a bit. Try to keep your lines even..

Overall, decent . . stay up.

Werd!