Im scouring cowards powered by our hypocritisy's lessons//
Flowering seeds to motivate hate and restate all of god's blessings//
i'm stressing, i need love, more like a gluttonous greed//
constantly changing lanes without thought of my current speed//
Too much on my mind at times, i wish i could've been born blind//
then interpret everything as it was primely designed//
I air my morbosity, proudly like a medal of honor//
depriving youths of justice as if i were sandra day o'connor//
I'm fondling pain, like a serial rapist in disguise//
cuz no matter how many times i do it, your the one that's left to cry//
knowledge speaks, but what happens to wisdom when theres no one to listen to//
and when you're gone, who says I have to be the one to hurt while missing you?//
Venting through polluted airways, my message always cut off at the end//
Left without love, and a life that's too hard to comprehend//
i'm shooting bad memories, as each one attempts to cross my minds borders//
shouting, blatantly, trying to reform laws, with prejudice-based world orders//
i've fed in faux emotions, my soul now runs on perservatives//
seeking for a drastic change, but my thoughts play the conservative//
Im shallow, my bones hollow, and im lacking emotional protein//
this has got to be too much insight for someone only thirteen//

I don't need post count to tell me I'm advanced//
You can throw me and time in the air and I'll bet time will be the first thing that lands//
I left for a while, Rapsearch found it's stroke//
Unlimited is back, sad thing is rapsearch is a joke//
Got newbies looking for direction and vets with no respect//
To dense for your own good you freeposting nusiance//
Manics with fear of light, so they'll never truely shine//
Only way you'd get props in rhyme is if you were re-doing mine//
Your worth less than a momento of twisted schemes//
Opinions from fans is the only time these bitches get mentioned in magazines//
Logikal is the savior whos come from a land unseen//
I'll take cheap shots until my guns commence their screams//
Where were you when I was first ever champ and top of all list//
You were still browsing websites giving unheard of message boards hits//
Unlimited is the inequality of math, the reason your GPA won't move//
A vaccum of trigonometry of the past, left breathing more DNA than your wound//
I'll combine opinions and call it a bible of babble//
like dennis miller and the pope engaged in a battle//
I'm deadly on the streets like outdoor cali market drivers//
I'll leave 8 dead and 40 on the scene targeted survivors//

13 Fucking Views and no Replies? What the fuck, why are you all sleeping on this, check it out shit... Just hit me back with some feedback.

yo man tight verse. I couldn't really see what u were getting at but as far as rhyme scheme, wordplay, vocab, mulit's, flow it was all good. tight strong rhyme bro. and look out for mine and masta c's new rhyme whach I will be posting sometime today called "high times" and leave some feedback. thanx in advance peace.

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Thanks for the positive feedback dawg, much apperciated, and no worries, ill post some feedback on the new shit you post, Ill drop some feedback on you and masta c's new ryhme too.

alright thanx bro I'll be postin "high times" up soon it features Masta C so make sure to include him on the feedback this time lol. thanx again.

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Good peice i thought, flow was good, your vocab seemed good as well, you had some good multies i saw, i liked reading this peice, keep dropping man.

Yo thanks for the feedback, don't worry, Ill keep droppin lol..

Uppin for Feedback

i liked this, this was a decent peice. The flow as decent, and your choice of words was also good. work on your structure but other then that overall this was pretty good. Keep writing and ill be watching for some more of your drops..

Return The Favour!

Werd!

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=80973

Ye ye dawg no problem, and thanks for your feedback dawg, i posted some shit on yo thread, apperciate it, peace.

i like dat shit mane.flow was good and good vocab.good overall shit.


CTF(represent)

i liked this, this was a decent peice. The flow as decent, and your choice of words was also good. work on your structure but other then that overall this was pretty good. Keep writing and ill be watching for some more of your drops..

agree totally with this guy, for a newbie your ill

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Yo thanks for the feedback dawgz... Appreciate it lotz...

this is some fuckin wank spittin, ya havn't got a fuckin clue LMAO

biaacchhh...................................

Dat was sum tight su m tight shit keep droppin hot shit on dis bitch mane im feelin yo shit u rippin it dawg.holla