i have a lyrical style that untouchable//
my shit is so complex, that it untraceable//
disgraceable//
it wat i call wen you touch the decks//
ur shit aint sound complex//
u gettin fucked up so much, dat u should call me sex//
i stomp the shit out u with fuck "AIR FORCES ONES"//
an blast u wit heat that resemble 'AIR FORCE GUNZ'//


it only a few lines i kno, an the ryme pattern aint so great,
but if sum 1 could rate it an point me in da right direction,


dat wud be sweet as a nut

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You got alot of elevating to do. Just keep working at it, that's the only way your going to hone your um, skills. And you're not going to get far doing anything half assed. Hope this helps...

It was aight u need sum wwork tho dawg but if u kept workin on it im sure u would be good.keep spittin tho mane.holla

keep writin.aight.holla


CTF(represent)

aight, like everyone else said u do have alot of elevatin to do, but that was aight for a first post. work on fittin more vocab and multis in ur verse though. hold ur chin up though and keep postin and ull elevate.

yo can u please return the favor and check out my post?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=81167
thanx

peace.....