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Old 09-22-03, 02:48 PM   #1
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iSoL has come.

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I came from flame, the birth of a one star.
Shooting the sky, just to travel a far.
Out of no where a legend was born.
Lashing out at the world, sanity torn.

Hoping somethin to come from this.
Another kid, just sent to piss
So many people off, a site to be seen.

Children wondering where i have been.
Over the world, i sit and just gaze.
Moving people and pawns, for days an days.
Every boy and girl, here, to and from.

Chanting finally..
iSoL has come.
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Old 09-22-03, 03:36 PM   #2
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O0o0o0oh, Poetic Type Piece. .

I felt this on more of a poetic vibe than anything else, the flow wasnt there for me, it always seemed to be like. . one syl;lable out or something and i couldnt quite catch on, it was too short to really grasp and get into, but i thought it was decent for what was there, vocab its strongpoint, flow its weakest, add more multi's / internals instead of leaving it at basic one syllablke rhymeing, and drop the whole Sureal-esque structure of breaking up the bars, no one's feelin` it but Sureal, lol.

It was decent, should of been better, would of been better if more planned out / worded slightly and given flow.

Reply to one of mine that you see up.
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Old 09-22-03, 06:09 PM   #3
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thought this was an overall weak peice, i also agree wit camarac in that was too short and poem like

"BUT As you grow so will da flo"....................peace dawg!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 09-22-03, 06:23 PM   #4
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thank you both, ill come doper next time.. i hope.

edit: and its broken up for a reason.. "isol has come" read the first letters.
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Old 09-22-03, 07:37 PM   #5
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^uppity up up.
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Old 09-22-03, 08:27 PM   #6
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i like the creativity of the piece, it's refreshing to read something different, i liked it not so much as a verse but poem.
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Old 09-22-03, 09:28 PM   #7
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Isol has come, NOW GO HOME!!!

juss kiddin lol.....look nice drop for a newb ive seen in a while,,,,, startin advice even up your bars jsut a slight more, an lengthen it a little bit if you get that done you will be commin better than most new ppl around here,,then with time u will get more into it
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Old 09-22-03, 10:00 PM   #8
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Yeah this was a nice peice, Pretty creative i thought, You could use more multies and your flow was alright needs some work but it will get better as you keep posting, just keep dropping, and if you could check out Me And Gene Pools peice called 2 Of A Kind, Thanks.
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Old 09-22-03, 10:31 PM   #9
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thank all of you, its greatly appreciated. ill be sure to take all advice given. 'cept the go home thingy. isol is here to stay.
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Old 09-22-03, 10:41 PM   #10
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lol^^^ hope to see more of you
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Old 09-22-03, 10:51 PM   #11
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you had sum good rymes and a nice flow,good overall.holla
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Old 09-22-03, 11:05 PM   #12
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this wasnt a bad piece for a newbie, it portrayed your poetic side a little more, flow was simple and lacked multis,u gotta have multis,work on wordplay,and rhyme scheme,other than that this wasnt that bad,keep elevatin.~1~
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Old 09-22-03, 11:14 PM   #13
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i thought this was an aight peice. like a bunch of other people had said i was feelin the poetic vibe, but anyway it was ok dude. the content was orginial and so was the topic.

yo can u check out my post, its called 'back in hell' thanx

peace.....
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Old 09-22-03, 11:27 PM   #14
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aight flow was good but lengthen it.holla


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Old 09-23-03, 03:07 PM   #15
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i dont wnat to lengthen it. it got my point across.
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