hypocritical critical separation indivisible im leaving individuals the chance to get literal
Time and essence are unlivable if its not filled with principles but is the choice we make made at all that sensible
fuck decisions that keep a long lasting affects breaking our neck for a bottomless check gaining respect
thats unreal a bum deal you mine as well kneel because your closing yourself in like beef cattle in fields
your infield catching lines drives to stop a batter, im 500 yards scope gun and horse saddled
thats the way i think everytime I blink an alternative motive flows by at a rate ice rink
urinate twice pink that means ure pissin blood
to me it just means ure kidneys are in need of love
push and shove forcefullness with gain nothing on me
ive been jumped so many times i didnt get the chance to bleed
a manson seed, you supose
alright Id like to shove a syringe in your nose filled with cyanide at 20 below
but that would mess up the flow, the same as messin with po
the world is spinning in circles and confessions are slow
to except were all not perfect my surface is that of purpose
leave underachievers cracked out and nervous
sitting in corners between bodegas and pawners
reading the bible believing the armadgeddons upon us
their just wishing for the world to end, mine is to begin
a new light finding bringing out forth whats within
cause constant confusion wears thin
the mental
of how a world with lack of direction can make you stand down
want hands out?
im in doubt
of me ever begging for a lesser mans importance
feeling tension in my chest as I peep visions of falseness
human interaction is filled with coarseness
not smooth
It's time for words of action wont force this
on you
So choose a realization interaction is inevitable theres no misplacin

aight,like da flow of it but sum lines were good and sum were bad,not bad like aight.But if you work on it;it can have potential but i really like yo flow.keep spittin yo shit mane i like it.cold.cold.


CTF(represent)

It was aight overall u had sum good lines sum weak ones but u got a flow much luv 4 ya keep on droppin hotshit.

Yeah this was a alright peice, try to even your lines out so it flows a little better though, you had some good lines and some weak ones, but your flow was good though, maybe use some more multies, just keep dropping, and if you could check out me and Gene Pools peice called 2 of a kind, thanks.

actuallyy was feelin that drop, it was a nice peice, i think the flow was a little sketchy in sdome points but the lyrics made it sound good, nice drop keep it up dawg

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^^^werd. the wordplay was ok, the vocab was actually pretty good, but like rule said the flow dropped in some places, but overall it was a pretty tight drop. keep postin dude i enjoyed readin that.

yo can u also check out my post its called 'back in hell', thanx

peace.....

YOU GOT MAD SKILLZ AND ARE ABSTRACT IN STRUCTURE LIKE I AM I WANT TO HEAR IT NOT READ THIS I THINK THIS WOULD BE ILL