Im gained by doin drugs too often,usin slugs to soften,smokin wit thugs and coughin//
smoke an ounce a day and tha high wont come back,need tha high from that so u want some crack//
lets not jump ahead,too much TOLERANCE and you could be dead,takin blunts to tha head//
eventually change-to-cane,line after linell stain-ya-brain,years of abuse will mame-ya-frame//
turnin all skinny,u as wide across as a broken penny,rock tha snow up and smoke it plenty//
crystal meth is next,feel tha pain in ya chest and know ya hexed,sniffin glass and ice,wanna better deal better ask-tha-price//
then theres people who boil ther poison,shoot into there vein and toil wit noises//
directly effect-the perception of reality,in-depth except for tha brain abnormalitys//
cause a negative effect on ya seeds,brain tumors and such causin nose and ears to bleed//
skip tha hallucinogens cause most are for tha teens,even though tha freak outs cause tha screams,and horrible visions plague ya dreams//
even though i skipped a few you get tha point of tha story,drugs lead to TOLERANCE which leads to an end so gory,where theres no glory.

uppin for some replies dont sleep.^^^

uppin for some replies^^^

it was ok, most pieces are slept on...

Topic: its somewhat not played, but it was clear n well structured.... got the reader

Wordplay: it was good, not over elaberitive n it wasnt to simple... it matched the piece and had complexity an it helped the structure... but it lacked emotion.. bad too

Flow: it worked with the piece, style is basic an played alot, but it was n ok read... for the piece it worked.. could of had more in it, seemed empty in places, like it was fading in an out alot....


Overall: 7/10


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uppin this piece

Dam..this shit was crazy, I loved the topic and how it wrapped up in the end. The flow and imagery in this was off the chain, hopefully u dunt be fuckin with these drugs, but after reading this rhyme u got me thinkin twice bout ya uses, drugs is bullshit and ya verse should be submitted to every Rehab and kids who are smoking wed 2 dam much.. like me..Everything on point..no flaw except ya structure. i dunt like the "//", it bothers, but who gives a fuck cause the lyrics is what actually matters..uno..
Favor for a Favor..

yea this is mainly generated from my experiences with these drugs when i was a little younger, pretty much now all i do is smoke too much dam weed lol, but other than that im jus tryin to do some shit with my life.~1~

Feelin DiverseSyndicate, Peep some of my pieces an tell me if you wanna collaberate... Peep 'My creative mind, opens minds' an the remix of 'Words are weapons... an 'Workout session'!!!

I'll post some new material later!!!

Peace, Funn Out.