Take a lesson from what I'm manefesting/
This is a text to be testing./
Stand up straight like my penus erecting/
Checking, the styles so mortal to kombat like da ebola infecting/
Its high school in here, the jocks are to stupid to be engaging./
Copy Cats prowl my alleys looking for a verse to begin chasing/
Like a mouse, I know my destenation is deep in the basement/
I take a risk posting flows as suckas empty out bullet casings/
Tellin it how i see the panorama, i care less, fuck da "fama"/
Fake m.c's who fire up my temper get blasted with a gama/
I respect m.c's who recognize that this young ese's stamina/
Distance typing around this rapbattle diameter/
All the freestylers that are in the circle call it a cypher/
Not dope, tight, or ill, just having fun trying to get higher/
Above ameteur is cool enough cuz i never get tired/
I'm like bond fire, lit up to scorch the your whole sattire/
Electro magnetic i recharge my battery without a plier/
Can do it myself strait dyer as this flow ends murdering
without hire/

i like this verse it a hot drop
u got skills, i cant tell of anything wrong wit the verse thats too major


peace

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that was a pretty good post man, i thought the flow fell off a little, but i guess it depends on the reader, the wordplay was ok, the vocab was good, the content and topic were original, overall good post, keep postin and elevatin, i enjoyed readin that.

peace.....

thanks for the reply my friend. i will keep an eye on your flows the same way you did to my flows. Just comin real with ill techniques that i practice just for a good time. i know what i am capable of, but there are more like me out there who take it to a different level. mad props to you and your homies dog. peace out

i thought it was well composed and flawless especielly if it was spit not writ

yeah this was a pretty good peice i thought, it was a good read, your flow was alright got off track at some points but it was good, your wordplay was good along with your vocab and your content was good, overall id say it was a good peice, keep dropping.