. O Pot1ent O .

Mainstream artists today are cloning a new generation
Infiltration of appearance stating little ones allocations
Just bimbo's without imgination...only one who blonde
Has the bonds of prospecting beyond so kids are fond
Of their sums instead of others that pledge their brains
So what remains is black mans songs with elvis's name
In-flame there fame with cocaine so there seen as hot
Little down the track it detracts and there careers shot
Appear on tv spots, maybe thats why teenagers got em
Idolising them providing them wit dreams thats forgotten
Wrong!! They introduced dreams that made kids aspire
What to tho? Be the exact same for little ones to admire
In there attire, Games no longer about their musical skills
Artists style and beauty to move is whats useful in deals
Its the crucial feel that counts, Beyonce got that no doubt
Ain't gotta dime voice but gets mine moist..lol..in the mouth
Fo real it's that down south...what? sex is producers concoct
Don't be all shocked, Froid is right, You can't avoid short tops
Short skirt like they belts, I'll become a roofer just so I'M felt

. O G. Hod O .

I can't bare to hate the signs as I leave the barricades behind
Whilst guitar-laced bass lines are spared to serenade my mind
It's not entertaining - I never even chuckle, except for the rumors
If only I could decide the mainstream as the collective consumer
Our hearts would come to tell instead of targeting what sells
I'd screw executives and, quite frankly, damn the marketing to hell
I'd enter Tainment: a budding nation as hits are surfacing abusively
A slap in the face of conformity; Nobody's interpreting it musically
We've bartered with our tears until its charter disappears
Emotion-filled sob-stories makes me think I'm smarter than my peers
Give me a chance with it. . I'd ensure that the second time is balanced
How can we decide industry pioneers before even recognizing talent?
The pedestal's name scoffs at the edible famed drops . .
Of 'hip-hop legends' filled with inevitable name drops
The phuture's cloudy when I laugh and count the cons we're citing
We label this rebelistic 'til the educators frown upon our writing

fuck-a-cliché .

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Good collab here...

Nice content...
Imagery was good from both...

Vocab was impressive from G. Hod...

Nothin against pot1ent- you came nice as well but G. Hod's verse made this piece for me...

Good drop to both

Dope collab...Nice topic...Got your point across dopely...

Favorite part from Pot1ent

Has the bonds of prospecting beyond so kids are fond
Of their sums instead of others that pledge their brains
So what remains is black mans songs with elvis's name
In-flame there fame with cocaine so there seen as hot
Little down the track it detracts and there careers shot

Favorite part from G. Hod
It's not entertaining - I never even chuckle, except for the rumors
If only I could decide the mainstream as the collective consumer
Our hearts would come to tell instead of targeting what sells
I'd screw executives and, quite frankly, damn the marketing to hell
I'd enter Tainment: a budding nation as hits are surfacing abusively
A slap in the face of conformity; Nobody's interpreting it musically


Dope drop from both...Keep it up...Peace

thanks, folks . But, seriously - let me get some constructive criticism, above all else to spur Pot1ent's gradual growth. Nice drop, boy'o.

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i was feelin this collab, i thought potients verse was pretty good, it had good flow and i was feelin the vocab, but im wit chrit, i thought G. Hod ripped it, i was feelin the wordplay, flow, and multis the most. i dunno what ur expectin people to say as critcism, cause as far as i could tell nothin was wrong. good drop, keep droppin homies.

yo if u have the time can u hit up my post?
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82558
thanx

peace.....

G.Hod=Great linguist

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enjoyed both drops
said what im thinking and what alot of people think im sure
on point topic wise...
potient ur flow was good...liked some of the comedy thrown in towards the end....overall probly the best drop ive seen of yours...or at least i liked it the best
i'm not even gonna quote any lines from either of you...cos theres alot that caught my eye
ghod..as usual u came with a dictionary spit and seemed to flow smoothly to me
liking the content alot..some quotables as well...but im too lazy to pick them out

both stayed on point thruout the drop and got ur view across while keeping the reader entertained....
thats what its all about^
props

Prolly i lot of you gonna hate on me cause it seems the most of worship ghod....

but are you a poet or a rapper?
i bet you're both. and that's cool but then be both cause im checkin on too many lines that do make sense for a rapper....

all this stuff has to "sound" good. And sooo much of it does like i really enjoyed the lines with targeting and marketing(choice)

On the other hand... what's with "I'd enter Tainment" that doesn't make sense spoken aloud. Besides, how does a hit surface abusively? Maybe hits surface so when rapper needs to rhyme with musically...

im not tellin im just sayin...peace and good work

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Thanx

ok-yo... i liked it, the vocab was str8 up there, like readin' a dictionary, pot1ent's spelling was a little off... lol... but the overall flow an' depth of imagery is what really made this piece... stay up... 1

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Agreed, it does sound awkward; however, there is substance behind the line . This whole piece revolves around the indignation I harbor towards blasé, culture-saturated entertainment . When I say that the hits "surface abusively," I mean to dictate the fact that these songs (hits) that we hear daily are corroding our minds - filling up space that could be used for better purposes (abusively). I was skeptical about the wording, and I'm happy you brought it up. .

As for "entering Tainment," it's basic wordplay - I am sure you realize that . I wanted to offer at least one piece of wordplay to our collaboration . As I "enter Tainment," I enter the culture-saturate world of mainstream entertainment. Thankss for the replies, folks.

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Perhaps our last journey to the top . Give us some critique, like now!

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