Soon to be audio, its gon be a collabo so dis is jes ma verse, jes wrote it up

gimme some feedback

Believe me fam when I leave the van with a bleeding hand//
You can bet someone's face got peeled with fan blades//
Fuck your fan base, no relief for fans//
When I leave a man with no fuckin knees or hands//
To please a land of psycopaths, thieves and gangs//
Doesn't make no fucking sense, (Drama easy mayn)//
Fo sheezy dan, with a gun I'll grease a man//
To show da animosity that's deep within//
(trust me it rhymes)

My inner vein, my body, my life, my soul//
I fight to hold, but my hands feel tight and cold//
My control, diminishes, the light beholds//
A path to new beginnings but my likely foes//
Deny my throne, the ywant me to tremble 'n' shake//
See me crawl on my belly like a genuine Snake//
Drama ain't got take shit from no one//
No matter how many times you try, I'll keep da throne dun//

[Hook]
You can't stop me (niggaa)
You can't break me (niggaa)
I'm a mountain (niggaa)
You can't shake me (niggaa)
I'm on top of my game, no mo whips and chains
I remain on da throne and ya'll gon remember my name//

oh p.s. ill peep yall shit, so peep this mayn

either leave a link or da title of yer open mic and ill check it out, im gon be busy awhile so i won peep shit now

in poetry read myne NOW BIOTCH lmao

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now to your peice

Fo sheezy dan, with a gun I'll grease a man//

FO SHEEZY?

dan ?
where you high lmao?

but teh grease a man covered it up and gave the whole peice a comical edge to it it was short n easy to read
pretty good overall
but not somethign that id remeber your name by!

come on yall lay some feedback

Yeah this was a pretty good piece, good read i thought, you had ok vocab, multies were pretty good too, content was good, you had good structure, overall id say it was a pretty good piece, keep dropping.

to Hazy, i have a friend name Danny SHORTENED DAN......so lol watch it........my boy from high school and we in college together now.......