yo, this battle is normal rules,
lets see what your made of *bitch*

Alright this is it, i'll do more than just spit/
i'm though goin easy and loseing this shit//-1
alright oli-dogg, so you've seen my verse/
but all you seen was me spit and curse//-2
i'm tryion this time, and thats not it/
lets reminise, this time i wont miss//-3(implying that pine will win)
see my words confuse and cause dazzes/ (my words will confuse)
i'm more than just a lil girls craze's//-4(not just a one hit wonder)
this time i aint even goin full out/
but i'll still cause you to Shout//-5(implying that oli will be pissed)
see i've lost resent/ (i've love lately)
but al least my rhymes are decent//-6
so like i said to mike, do be a fuckin fairy/
perfect your lines, get out that dictionary//-7(you know shit)
well thats if, i wont say no more/
i'm to tired to rap at you anymore//-8(you a waist of my time)

uppin (1).
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wtf y the hell would u up b4 he even posted a verse and that was a terrible verse anyway u explained everthing u need to practice alot or sumthin
check the wackness emergency center

wtf, dude, buzz off, if u aint votein then dont post. i'm uppin cause he isw chokein, DUMBASS...........................
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u clown how the hell am i spose to vote when there only one verse but ill take ur advice and buzz off dude
lmao

ok pine dat was a shit verse to start of this *battle*,
look at pine, he tryed so hard but it was still shit sum1 get his ass a *flannel*(to wipe his face,cus hes tryed so hard),

listen *pine*, ill crack ur fuckin *Spine*, snort you up like i snort on this *line*, and spit you bak out so its clear this victorys*mine*,

ok so im fuckin wid u bitch, but like like i fuck the *c*nts*,
speaking ogf *c*nts*, u jst like 1 cus you only flow at special times of da *months*(period,lol),

pine cone ur lyrically wak, you should call ur self the *rookie*,
outa a biscuit and a girl this faggot choose da fuckin *cookie*,

so thats it bitch ive just left you phisically and emothionly *disabled*,
and wid da gift of being called THE ROOKIE, this bitch is fuckin *labebled*.

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pz

yo i fucked 1 bit up itsd mena read..

ok so im fuckin wid u bitch, but not like i fuck the *c*nts*,

I think this was abclose battle, but oli dogg TOOK IT WITH PUNCHELINES AND HIS FLOW WAS BETTER, GOOD BATTLE THOUGH AND IT WAS CLOSE SO WHO KNO'S WHO'LL WIN IN THE END.......................

HIT THIS UP

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82883

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ite thx dawg but lets get sme poll votez.uppin(1).................................... .................................................. .pz

sorry, forgot to vote on the poll, done it now tho............................................

hit my abttle up

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=82883

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CUMON YALL LETS VOTE PLZ.UPPIN(2)...................................... .................................................. ........PZ

uppin for some votes.....(2)..
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Pine, you really need to work on your flow. You need some wordplay in your punches, and make them more creative. They should also be good/clear enough to where you don't have to explain every one of them.

OLI, you likewise need to work on your flow. You had punches in there, but none hard hitting. Your wordplay was lacking severely. I don't think either of you used multi's. Check out some of the "vets"(doesn't apply to all high posters) on this site. Look at the wordplay they throw in their punches, the multi's they use, the structure of their verses.

Keep battlin and elevate

Vote ~ OLI_DOGG

thanks for the advice i'll work on that......
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