HOOK
And you know ,I know,we know they know.*sung*
EVERY THING THAT IS OR HAS WILL EVENYUALLY COME TO AN END.
And you know, I know ,we know,they know sung
IF YOU AND YOUR ENEMIES GOT CLOSER THEYD BE YOUR ONLY FRIENDS.

I attack first cause I want the defensive- to take this offensive-
show my ass on rap to give to give dick rider an insentive.
Im a rapper to every extent- of my content-and accent-
so fuck a commercial intent.
if you rappers were right and im trippen why haven’t I fallen off yet?
It’s the decent from a family tree- of m.c.’s-
while you m.c.’s couldn’t be ill with hereditary H.I.V.
….IT’S A CONSPIRACY……………………………
I seriously believe that from the fact I get dissed on track but hear my similies-
And sililiquies-on your cd’s-ep and lp’s-
I HAD TO REFORMAT MY RAPS…..for so long I bullshitted-
I never realized I used to be wack till you bit it redid it and spit it.
But im me!!!!!
no style im just diverse-from each verse- to the next text -
From complex dialects,-I shatter the English eddicate to sentence fragments.
5 sentence’s from is combo not a paragraph-
take a verb and smack you with it now you only have 3 teeth when you laugh.
I only had three friend in life…..ignorance, lonliness and strife-
Life was a bitch, I wanted to get with-
but death was my mistress, poverty my wife.
So what do you do when you aint got nothing to feast?
I satisfy my appetite on street beats- and write raps for me first then the street.
Remain me…. the name reps the identity.
I wear it on my chest so when you face me you see defeat-
I call you fake cause you’d have blisters if you were really holden heat.
This slang aint a game but still we all trying to compete-
There’s mad beaf from these writing thieves-
how you saying you hungry and need to eat?.
When I peace this enough for it to be complete….
I’ll chew you in instant with free or writ-
so when I make your career …..fall~down…. im just dropping some shit.
TO YOU FAKE FRIENDS “ET TUTE BRUTE”
cause you cats be killing me with the bullshit you say.
You this~ you that~ and im not!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
My JOINTS~CRAMP yours….next time write that crap out with ICY HOT.

HOOK
And you know ,I know,we know they know. *sung*
EVERY THING THAT IS OR HAS WILL EVENYUALLY COME TO AN END.
And you know, I know ,we know,they know sung
IF YOU AND YOUR ENEMIES GOT CLOSER THEY’D BE YOUR ONLY FRIENDS.

this was an ill piece, wordplay was ill,vocab was tight, rhyme scheme and structure were tight, tha only thing is i didnt like tha way you ended it, i thought you couldve ended it better, other than that this was a tight drop,keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

I call you fake cause you’d have blisters if you were really holden heat
so when I make your career …..fall~down…. im just dropping some shit
Life was a bitch, I wanted to get with
^haha good stuff..stood out

again filled with some nice lines
word play and humour seem to be your speciality
wasnt feeling the first third of this verse in all honesty
seemed to lack content
after that it picked up alot and finished up well...however ive read alot of your pieces and maybe its just me but u seem to be in a bit of a rut writing wise..the content isnt always as interseting as it used to be...just my thoughts man
peace

IT HAS MORE MEANING NOW READ THE 1ST THIRDIT SET THE REST UP

Yeah this was a good piece, it made a nice read as well, your flow was good, your vocab was good as well was your wordplay, your content was good also, overall id say this was a good piece, keep dropping.

THNKS POP THT MEANS ALOT

uppin

oh yea...FEEDBACK...

DOG this was good, flow was there but kinda off at times
ya need to get that idea of counting syllabuls!
wordplay was... well perfect...
as usual good drop kid

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83050

NO POP THE RHYMES ARE MIXED WITH BREAKS WHERE I TALK THE LINE NOT RHYME IT I FALLOWED AESOP ROCKS FORMAT ON IT TRYING SOMETHING NEW

thats the problem...iv never heard aesop
by the way... what was that feedback u dropped on mine?

you did what i expected you always on point and i feel your one of the most slept on pop i8 cant say much that would be constructive when i already ike everything i read from you