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This is to a backstabbin bitch name Amy who used to be my but she can just kiss my fukkin ass now cuz she aint nothin but a bitch that talks shit behind the scenes fukk all that. Tell me what u think aight here we go.
Fukk u bitch, I can't believe what u said about me Tellin nothin but lies, thought u'd always be a friend to me Nothin but a backstabbin jelous bitch who deserves to die When I said I'd cry if u died well sorry bitch I lied Wouldn't give a fukk, a smile might even cross my face Your a fukkin disgrace, and I hope I never have to see your face I'll spit in it and tell you whats on my mind Have u read this rhyme, bitch this shits not kind I was always there for you yet ur just like the rest I'd give u a bullet proof vest just to shoot you in the chest It wouldn't kill you, but just cause crazy pain Hope to kill you inside till you cut your veins all in vain Call me cryin, asking for support and shit Bitchin and throwin a fit, well bitch I quit U aint a friend to me, ur an enemy If I had the chance u would die from the hands of me Ur lucky I just spit rhymes and don't react Cuz u'd be dead on ur back 6 feet deep in a casket, With ur head in a basket Your arms and legs seperate, Bitch u like to test it Well now I've exploded, this shits not even in lines Should give u a fine for bein a backstabbing bitch shootin me in the back with a nine Told bullshit when its not ur right to speak Ur fukkin weak and ur life is straight bleak Thats fine, I fukkin hate u with my heart and soul My reputation that u stole now I start in a hole Thanx bitch thats really nice I appreciate it Thats sarcasm if you can't tell from my spit Don't fukk around again or u'll leave with one black eye Maybe 2 or maybe u'll die, and guess what bitch If you die nobody will care and sure as hell wont cry So just fukkin die so I can see u in hell bye bye -KeMy$t (known on Rapbattles.com as Defaced) |
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yo hook it up w/ some responses thanx
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It was a pretty good piece, alright read i thought, there was emotion behind it, the structure was pretty decent, it flowed pretty well i thought though, overall it was a pretty good piece, keep dropping.
and if you could return the feedback.. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83050 |
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I take it yous dont-a-like the bitch huh.........................lol
thought the flow was pretty tight, an a liked the subject even though it was all hatin, she must have pissed you off dawg keep the rhymes comin, try and introduce some lovin// cos it releases the anger, an your scaring me cousin// Ha! Ha! ..........Holla>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> |
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Yo.... Talk about emotion damn i wanna kill the bitch now too...It flowed real nice, vocab was straight but emotion made this whole piece keep that type of shit commin cuz you got me amped to slap a bitch
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thanx for the imput ya this is a pure hate piece i can write happy shit to but man this one made me feel so much better. This bitch used to be one of my best friends and she turned her back started talkin shit and got me in some fukkin trouble with a lot of people cuz she told them bullshit that wasn't true. Hook this up w/ some more responses thanx
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yo some peeps please hit this up w/ some feedback aight peace
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Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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FUCK AMY
isnt venting about girls so fucking enjoyable...now to work the flow was pretty good but was thrown off a few time the level of emotion in this was good..i felt it vocab was not 2 great...need help internals/mulits lacked... get some of those in there holla at me if u ever want to collab if you would be so kind http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...threadid=84159V |
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anytime ill do a collab this shit wasn't really spose to flow great and have multi's just pure emotion in this piece but ya hit me w/ a pm we will collab aight PEACE
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I know your problem... You still like dis gal... you just HATE the fact you do. I been there... But your work so not too bad... upgrade vocab... flow is good...
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no no no aint like that she was never a thing aight peace
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