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10-02-03, 06:15 PM | #1 | |
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Catch Up
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...Im on some fucked up shit at the moment...
...::Potnet Science::... All my life i've winged on how i been playing catch up All the doors seemed unhinged then all slammed shut Right in my face then sights escaped my perceptions How is all going to relate when i only got subjections? Readers want protection, Like me perfection deserted Then twisted thoughts give a reflection thats perverted Rejecting and hurting< that sums up all of my feelings Never tryed yeilding yet birth marks didnt start heeling I started squeeling...Pigging out on all the junk food It weighed my mind down not letting the punk elude I suffered one problem after the other till i discovered Worlds for exploding sheets to blow peoples covers Its smothered all over the lifes, Is this to gain pride? Yes, We all show up others so we can regain our lives Don't deny...You all do whether its bettering someone Do it to survive...Whether its disrespecting someone We all have dun and will remain to as time passes by O, Bye time...To never see it again because its died Or was no effort implied or did i never expose people? Never disposed of my feebles!! |
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10-02-03, 06:27 PM | #2 | ||
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IP:
this was good .. nice message brought across .. flow was flowless .. youre doing the box structure so well .. expand and explore with your flow though and see what you can think up of ..
multi's .. not too many in here but you pulled off the ones you did quite nicely .. wordplay was there, as well ... was enjoyin' this .. you keep elevating .. im glad to see that stay up .. pz..1 |
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10-02-03, 06:31 PM | #3 | ||
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IP:
yeah i agree this was a good piece, it was worth the read, it flowed alright through out the piece i thought, your vocab was pretty good, your wordplay was alright, content was good too, overall id say it was ap retty good piece, keep dropping.
and if you could return some feedback.. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83050 |
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10-04-03, 06:54 PM | #4 | |
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IP:
Thanx..Up
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10-04-03, 07:21 PM | #5 | ||
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IP:
Duckie nice, imma tell u ur vocab made my msn duck swim^^
^Concept ^^ RoA style, ......flow , damn R.Duck dont even flow like that, ....and u elevatin allot to damn this was a nice piece Mad props
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10-04-03, 08:00 PM | #6 | ||
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IP:
nice man, nice useage of vocab, good subject
the flow was nice and you used some nice imagery keep it up, man, ill piece |
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10-04-03, 08:08 PM | #7 | ||
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IP:
Word.. the box stucture was pulled off perfectly.. only other person ive seen du it so well is Camarac
Lyrics were good too.. i see uve elevated a lot w/open mics.. i guess ur right.. u do learn alot.. meta's were aight .. i liked "blow your covers" shit that was nice, flow was on point ways of improvement.. damn umm.. imma say.. your biggest flaw is that u havent got a mic u lazy cheapskate FUCK.. go get 1 niguhhhhh lol |
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