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10-03-03, 01:30 PM | #1 | |
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Newb Rap.
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Im a newb, but here goes
Spittin: Everytime i wake up, find my girl wanting too break up\ Life aint easy at an early age\ Getting qweezy while getting boo'd off the stage\ So while i be spitten this onto the page\ It'l be written and locked in a cage\ Cant find a job, getting attacked by the mob\ Mc donalds put me down\ Saying i was a clown\ I wasnt ill, feeling so hurt inside\ About too kill, in a car collide\ As i said im a newbie |
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10-03-03, 01:32 PM | #2 | |
Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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aight 1st thing... your flow was wayy off
a cheap easy way to tell is if the lines look around the same lenght on the screen 2nd you need to up your vocab... being a newbie only means your going to get better just keep dropping and looking at other peoples Open Mics |
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10-03-03, 01:35 PM | #3 | |
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Points taken
Tnx |
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10-03-03, 02:57 PM | #4 | ||
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no man dont listen do your thing but turn to audio its much better.
and your flow fits an audio head. keep elvating
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10-03-03, 06:22 PM | #5 | ||
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yea your flow was like no where
u need to realise being a newbie isnt such a bad thing all u need is guidance and u will peak dopness umm yea make sure next time you spit on a topic, not just randomness or yourself, like a topic,, umm u need to work on flow by maintaining a rhyme scheme and a strong bar structure like and even your lines more it helps with flow if your gunna go lien for line just keep playing with your style until u reach certain elivation and u'll get the hang of "text".......................................... return the favor http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83251 |
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10-03-03, 06:37 PM | #6 | ||
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bullshit man flow is what you make it...
if you can make this flow one a REAL microphone then props... D-Phylo is right, switch to audio and free more often... don't listen to ignant talk about how your lines don't look the same length on the screen...that DEFINITELY doesn't mean a thing... Yo and find a reason to spit and everything will come out nicely, {Peace}
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10-03-03, 08:05 PM | #7 | ||
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I totally agree wit Mag. Just do ur thing y'know. I started out bad but kept writin and typin shit and got better. Dont listen to anyone tryina put u down. When they do that, they tryina get u to write more better. I know u got potential man. Let it show.
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