Bitch, i'm gonna say this shit one time fast
i hope you choke on a muther fucken bottle cap
and when you choke i'm gonna make sure you die
cuz i'm gonna grab my knife and stab you in da eye
i could beat most of the vets, no prob at all
last thing i say is fuck all y'all


-just a little somethin


-feedback plz

please drop full lenght pieces from now on...
this is 2 short to be critiqued(spelling?)
if you want to stick to short drops go to the cypher
6 to 8 lines there

that was weak. next time use wordplay, punches, metas and multies if your going to diss someone. Make your next drop more structured it'll be more interesting to read.

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What the fuck is this?

uppin

ummm i would recommend elevating alot before writing another rhyme you had no word play or anything it didnt even have a good rhyme scheme so i would say elevate

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Thanks speek. At least you don't basically tell me to fuck off.

no prob, could you peep my piece Life What Is It Made Of

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I didn't thikn that it was bad at all just make it longetr next time and you'll be good. But for being short this was a good drop .if you keep dropping you'll elevate. Good read though just make it longer next time k

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