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10-05-03, 02:48 AM
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Old School Sexy...
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Life What Is It Made Of
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Just A Short Piece I'm Going To Write Its Parallel.. Death In A Few Days
I Don’t Know The Official Moment I Came Into This Existence Taught At A Young Age To Keep At Life With A Persistence Aint No Distance That Is To Far-off For Me To Catch Up Too Life Is Entirely Based On The Choices That Are Made By You How I Was Brought Up Taught To Choose Your Own Decision A Peaceful Word Is What I Envision, But First We Need A Revision World Division Caused By Class Imprisonment Of Each Other We’re All Brothers So Love Is What I Think To Smother Teach Each Other That Life Is Precious Don’t Test This Peace Exists… A Choice Faced By Anyone That Reads This Brought Together To Realize Our Mistreatment Of One Another Look To The Truest Soul Ever Who Was Born To The Virgin Mother Died For Our Sins Of One Another Shed Blood For Each Other Raised As A Fighter So This Cause Will Remain Struggling On So Don’t Mourn Let Our Existence Be Reborn And Fight On We Survive By The Image Of God So That Is How We Strive There’s Much Pain Felt Throughout So I Just Thank God I’m Alive
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Initial, Period  We're Coming For You
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10-05-03, 03:14 AM
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Banned
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sick rythm, overall ill, i'll wait a while before i battle you. Ha
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10-05-03, 03:26 AM
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IP:
good drop, flow could have been just a little better but other then that the vocab was ill and it was a nice read. Keep droppin adn elevating I like your style
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10-05-03, 04:58 AM
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That was deep. It was rather unique and it had a message. It had a nice flow to it and the vocab is right on. Good drop.
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10-05-03, 05:03 AM
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Light Weight
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the lines themselves were overall pretty tight....
but i personally hate all this esoteric bullshit that some spew on this site... if you could make this more meaningful...without burning a hole in a thesaurus then i would be really impressed... {Peace}
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10-05-03, 06:43 AM
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IP:
flow was iight could be better nice piece tho def feelin it
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10-05-03, 07:38 PM
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Old School Sexy...
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.: Uppin :.
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Acro Nim
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10-06-03, 02:02 AM
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aight...
your flow was good, it stayed at a good pace and it was easily read. your vocab was perhaps the best I've seen on this site... damn good kid, wordplay- your wordplay wasnt in this one, but like others before me said, its not needed in a peice like this... and your topic, I like this topic, its deep and it lets out emotion... I kinda like it when people drop something with a hidden meaning, I'm into poetry and stuff like that... overall this was a very nice drop... I like your style. thanks for the feed on my drop, A.T. |
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10-07-03, 02:36 AM
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Old School Sexy...
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Kay Uppin For Some More Feedback
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10-13-03, 04:24 AM
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Old School Sexy...
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10-13-03, 04:51 AM
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dope shit sonny...the vocab was ill...the content...dope...and the flow was hot...if I was you...I'd add just a few more multi'z and then this shit would be like super-dope...lol...that soundz like a drug...but anywayz...yeah...this piece was good...hit up my open mic called "Self Evaluation" when ya get a chance...
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