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I'm only above my boys while standin on a step//
Other wise my people my equal to the death// If you stuck in the mantle study the lay~out//(in deep shit) Life could be worse theres always a way~out// Train ya brain to fend for ya self// A friend might pertend for ya wealth// Off topic I've hit the pipe hugged the bong// Forced to rely on water cuz my blood is gone//(R.I.P.MOMnDAD) I've faught hand and hand wit my dawgs// Only to find that these fags were frauds// But some stayed real as we grown to the age// Like my boy Devon who road to the Grave/(R.I.P.) Now I owe him, he was the first to believe I could do it// And as far as skin goes he seen right through it// Cuz my heart is an engine pumpin in a vehicular ora//(mad strong) Devon you live through me, blood is thicka than water// (IF YOU COULD HEAR ME NOW....) Like DMX said to Kato I aint gonna say good-bye//(instead) I pray for you and my strength but I pray ta DIE// .......Just a little to deep for some of you ta handle R.I.P. to everyone I lost over the 15 years I been liven, Damn! |
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IP:
yo it was deep but i liked it...it had a good flow and nice vocab....
Cuz my heart is an engine pumpin in a vehicular ora//(mad strong) Devon you live through me, blood is thicka than water// i thought that that was the best part.... props..... peace.... |
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Yeah i agree...this was a pretty deep piece...i was feeling the emoticion in this...it flowed pretty well...your content was good...Your vocab was pretty good as well...I liked this piece...overall it was a good piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.
and if you could return some feedback. http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84048 |
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It was alright, work on ya vocab and ya rhymin tho, some of it didnt flow together either. Nice peice tho'
Keep droppin' {Love} |
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good looks on the feed back all yall .
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