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Old 10-07-03, 05:14 PM   #1
Genesis_two
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I'm only above my boys while standin on a step//
Other wise my people my equal to the death//
If you stuck in the mantle study the lay~out//(in deep shit)
Life could be worse theres always a way~out//
Train ya brain to fend for ya self//
A friend might pertend for ya wealth//
Off topic I've hit the pipe hugged the bong//
Forced to rely on water cuz my blood is gone//(R.I.P.MOMnDAD)
I've faught hand and hand wit my dawgs//
Only to find that these fags were frauds//
But some stayed real as we grown to the age//
Like my boy Devon who road to the Grave/(R.I.P.)
Now I owe him, he was the first to believe I could do it//
And as far as skin goes he seen right through it//
Cuz my heart is an engine pumpin in a vehicular ora//(mad strong)
Devon you live through me, blood is thicka than water//
(IF YOU COULD HEAR ME NOW....)
Like DMX said to Kato I aint gonna say good-bye//(instead)
I pray for you and my strength but I pray ta DIE//


.......Just a little to deep for some of you ta handle R.I.P. to everyone I lost over the 15 years I been liven, Damn!
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Old 10-07-03, 05:29 PM   #2
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yo it was deep but i liked it...it had a good flow and nice vocab....
Cuz my heart is an engine pumpin in a vehicular ora//(mad strong)
Devon you live through me, blood is thicka than water//
i thought that that was the best part....
props.....
peace....
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Old 10-07-03, 06:23 PM   #3
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Yeah i agree...this was a pretty deep piece...i was feeling the emoticion in this...it flowed pretty well...your content was good...Your vocab was pretty good as well...I liked this piece...overall it was a good piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.

and if you could return some feedback.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84048
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Old 10-07-03, 08:18 PM   #4
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It was alright, work on ya vocab and ya rhymin tho, some of it didnt flow together either. Nice peice tho'
Keep droppin'

{Love}
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Old 10-07-03, 09:02 PM   #5
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good looks on the feed back all yall .
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