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10-08-03, 01:21 AM | #1 | ||
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My Pencil
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Been A While Since I Wrote..
Key'd This Up In 15 Mins.. Power, Will, Strength - All Come From Tha Led With-In Be-gin To See Shit - Some Say Tha Pencil Will Sin Violins . . . Come From Wood, Tha Pulp Of All Intuition Acquisitions Fill’n Positions . . . Daily News Provisions Collisions Wit Law - Either Fall Or Keep Write’n Ignite’n Flames, Keep Burnin’, Tha Tip Stays Fite’n, Thru Nite,-Nd Like Bathrooms, Sometimes Are Shit May Stall, Or Fall . . . Can’t Call! But Tha Flow Never Stops At All! Stay Calm . . . Tha Gov Can’t Take Away Wut We Choose-Ta-Speak All Unique In Our Views, Write Wut U Feel, Fukk A Critique! Starts On One Sheet . . . Elite, One Form Of Labor A Life Savor . . . Wut’s Done, U Can’t D/Lete, No Eraser, No Back-Spacer, Have Faith, Say A Pray’er, Hope To Sustain Make Or Break - Keep Tha Pencil’s Ability In Tha Bakk Of Ya Brain!! Blah . . . Upp'n For Feedbakk |
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10-08-03, 01:23 AM | #2 | ||
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10-08-03, 02:33 AM | #3 | |
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IP:
aight...1st off...given this is text you dont have to make it look good
i.e. stay away from hypens, quotes, // etc. the flow was good... stayed easy to read the vocab was well used... keep it up the topic was kinda hard to get but u stayed on it..somehow the closer was good...nice way to wrap it up upping for u keep it up...and thanx for feedback next time just drop link at end of you post as such www.rapbattles.com |
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10-08-03, 04:24 PM | #4 | ||
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Thanks . . .
Upp'n For More Feed.. Don't Sleep |
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10-08-03, 04:37 PM | #5 | |
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IP:
what i liked about it most was the flow and lil use of vocab
good drop to say holla |
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10-08-03, 07:47 PM | #6 | ||
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Thanks . . .
Go In More Depth Upp'n |
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10-08-03, 10:45 PM | #7 | ||
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IP:
good flow and vocab. This was a pretty good piece. My fav lines:
'Power, Will, Strength - All Come From Tha Led With-In Be-gin To See Shit - Some Say Tha Pencil Will Sin' 'Stay Calm . . . Tha Gov Can’t Take Away Wut We Choose-Ta-Speak All Unique In Our Views, Write Wut U Feel, Fukk A Critique!' and from there on to the end i thought was the strongest part of the verse...nice lil drop. |
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10-09-03, 12:16 AM | #8 | ||
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Thanks..
Upp'n |
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10-09-03, 03:08 AM | #9 | |
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IP:
No doubt i was feelin it, good write. The concept is used allot but overall you expressed well wut ya wanted to flip and had a good flow with it. I liked the closer as well. keep it up
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