[color=royal blue][size=large]Know what it feels like to locked up inside,
to hide away from the pain,
that drains and stains the soul,
The untold was sold to all the newspaper
stands, THE DARK MAN, & his hands that shook it all,
watch it fall and slip, as you realize reality,
Snake eyes it has to be, live life and dont let life
live you, THE TRUTH, will set you free inside
your mind, only time can tell what hell you
continue to live, just give because love
will heal the saddness that you feel,
If you listen you can hear it
The Lord, The Son, and The Holy Spirit,
you can't see but you see what the Lord has given
to me, all ten fingers and all ten toes,
only the Lord knows what nobody knows,
when it rains it pours, I don't have an umbrella
but I do have the Lord, when the sun shines,
I find time to thank him for it, I sit down to write
rhymes, I thank him for it, if I should live life
and wake up in the morning, I'll thank him for it,
each breath that I breathe, I see the storn lifting,
up high I see it rise, I see the fog shift, sometimes
I know I dont try to be a good person, but then
I wonder why nobody can hear me hurtin,
it sounds so loud to me, it rings throughout
my ears, I think I start to bleed,
and I feel the salty tears, if I was I and
you were you, we would still be here,
amoung the forbidden and forgotten,
amoung the poison fruit,
with wings and angel eyes, I'll pray for you
and you, and hope that in our next life
it'll be easy and happy too[/COLOR][/SIZE]

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ill piece ma, vocab was tight, imagery was tight, structure was tight, all in all this wasnt that bad for a newbie, keep spittin ma.~1~

not really sure if im feeling this or not theres something missing and tho i cant quite pin point as of yet i soon will
id like to state that the blue font didnt do you justice
and your structure was nice short n easy to follow

the theme wa sjumpy but the parts where it was stable was good id suggest adding some more VIVID images that will make this peice JUMP out at the redaer nah mean?

thanks hazy, i didnt really revise this one b/c i kinda wrote it
when i went to jail for something messed. The charges nullified
and now i am sue'n the state so hard they wont know how to
sit down. So the content had special meaning i suppose.

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Interesting read.. I got the impression towards the end, this was a Goodbye of sorts, Im not sure if thats a goodbye to someone specific, or an old way of life, or past friends, or simply having made Peace... I just get the feeling like you ve been kicked down to the ground, and having been lost a long time, finally found your feet again and now stand tall. Bravely dusting off the past in order to see a brighter future.. A re awakening of your perspective if you will..
Either way, it is a good read. Thanks.

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