yo im bouts to drop a lil freestyle

yo this rhyme is strictly fo yo enjoyment my crew rolls deeper than niggas on unemployment/
nigga i have a date wit destiny if u wanna get merked nigga go ahead make a appointment/

i leave niggas mo blowed than che che and cong my rhymes pack mo power than king kong/
nigga some shit is just wrong~you claim to be a pimp but u wearin yo bitches thong/

i got to keep it real you can call me malice cause my rhymes are meant to kill/
nigga battlin me is stupid like a saint tryin to steal niggas be gettin merked they already know the deal/

yo i know this aint much but give me a lil feeback peeps.

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uppin
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holla at yo boi
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yo that was pretty nice...the first bar was hot, i was feeling that alot...the king kong bar kinda dropped it off a bit...but i was still feeling this, nice drop

keep it up, and holla at mine "Rookie"

peace

thanks fo the feedback cuz. ill hit yo piece up my nigga.

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holla at yo boi
~1~

too easy give me a link to yo piece so i can hit it up.



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holla at yo boi
~1~

that was a pretty good flow for a newb but u need to elevate but he thats okay i see potential in ur flows so keep droppin

just elivate
i see some great potential
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that was ok for a newb, it seemed hella short though, next time ima suggest u make it a little longer, try and include some more multis, ur vocab and wordplay was ok, ur flow seemed to be on targert for ur drop, and next time try and pick a different topic to post about, u got ability, just keep elevatin.....

peace.......

it was ok dog i mean you aint use multis no flow really a little structure though

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