this one dog thinks he is god but hes not he takes it up his slott, mr.flesh-n-bone u used the wrong tone now my flirtin skills im gonna hone, im gonna chat your mom up with my lines then ask her if she shines,of course she does it feels real good having her lips around my wood, your sad and mad at your dad he bummed u for years up the bum hahhah what a gag, you think i went to far with his mom i did it cause flesh wound is rotton like dott com.

i waz feelin ur last 1 more dne dis...in many ways i label dis weak..but 2 each his onw..i support da arts so keep fukkin w/ it,1~imag

flesh-n-bone p's me off hes a bit to big for his boots

oh wow LOL...ELAVATE...up your vocab an try an grab some multies an shit, your just starten so its iight...we all trying to grow lyrically but read shit from camarac an wordperfect an shit an c how they flow try to get shit comen with vocab and wordplay...i think you'd realize wutcha doing wrong if you read some vets stuff it helps...try it..peace

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^^ werd u need to elevate A LOT and add multies and ur vocab was extremely weak but keep postin and u'll get better

^^^straight wordness to all these cats, i dunno how to say this, U SUCK!!! u need to elevate in every way possible, ur flow was never on point, ur vocab and wordplay was weak, ur content and topic was hella played, even ur structure sucked, its all good though, keep tryin ur best.

peace.....

^^^^damn that sucked so bad
keep workin on your flow and structure
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one piece per day.

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