in SHOOL this fool must of DREW in DETENTION-
Cause your out~classed in rhyme, plus DRAW no attention
You got no skill so dont critique dont speak like detention.
just go nowhere like ANIMATED SUSPENCION.
Your games flawless but your gimic lacks my realness for perfection-
Basically you aint seeing me like cockeyed perception.
104 degree temp wouldn’t help your attempt at being ill…
even if with the intent of only for an instant you’ds be killed.
You couldn’t shine for a minute if I gave you a 60 second extension.
Cause It takes you a year per bar so take your 60 and collect pention.
Im verified to be identified as the lord of the mic chord even GOD would testify-
your lines so broke they receive welfare before you qualify.
You couldn’t work with me even if you had a resamay and applied.
Id, just Whip my dick and piss~ you~ off now your gold certified.
Think I have a complex? Let me show you complex.
I’ll subtract your ego-extract from your cerebro-
You wont make the sequel-like any movie with ven diesel.
Most rappers come up obnisent-but im beyond afficiant-
With getting retarded on mics like I was brain difficient.
Cell spliten my written so I can clone the death toll on microphone-
And stay underground like my area code was inside of a catacomb.

(`THIS IS SAID DURING A BEAT BREAK)
NONCENTZ… the BIBLE basher English edicate revisal trasher….
got NAZIS sayin shalam-(jewish term)

Make it so The only way you get play relay or tv replay
on a boom box is mailing yourself a time bomb.

You that cat who got braces before you battle and claim not to be a biter-
The only mic~check you know was paying off your ghost writer.
Saying you better than me that shits ludacris and wild-
In ciphers you get charged a fee to freestyle.
Battle and make you choke in front of over 15 billion in population-
Choke hold your radio station Block your AIR~wayS ventalation-
so you get no sirculation.
I worned you cock jokers-and dick blockers.
I go through 16 bars quicker than club hoppers-
MOOD SWING with PUNCH’s and make you as sensitive as EX poppers.

yo good drop dawg u always have the tightest vocab and ur flow just makes it all shine dawg good shit keep postin

your shit always flows
keep on postin...
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yo $$money$$, that shit was pretty ill. my favorite line:
''You couldn’t shine for a minute if I gave you a 60 second extension.
Cause It takes you a year per bar so take your 60 and collect pention.''
and this one was tight too:
"The only mic~check you know was paying off your ghost writer."
there's way too much of that shit that goes on in the industry. i bet ja has a ghost writer. who's got time to rhyme when your poppin' E all the time?

haha damn word that was dope...wasnt feeling the opening 2 bars but after that it was illness...flow was nice, vocab, content ect all good...nice drop...

Your games flawless but your gimic lacks my realness for perfection-
Basically you aint seeing me like cockeyed perception.

ill^

You couldn’t shine for a minute if I gave you a 60 second extension.
Cause It takes you a year per bar so take your 60 and collect pention.

dope^

I’ll subtract your ego-extract from your cerebro-
You wont make the sequel-like any movie with ven diesel.

haha, that made me laugh...

keep dropping son...

THNKS IM GLAD YOU LIKE THIS

uppin

up

Very well constructed piece!!.. It was alot better than previous ones by far.. Your lines had meaning

in SHOOL this fool must of DREW in DETENTION-
Cause your out~classed in rhyme, plus DRAW no attention

also some nice wordplay^^.. made an enjoyable read

..Your scheme was a bit basic though.. Maybe work on that a bit.. But overall this was good and the scheme was just a minor problem..Props

Feedback on my piece.. Make it detailed.. Either what you enjoyed of it and quaote the best or parts where i fell off.. Pz

Your wordplay is clever as hell, like usual. This is definitely one of your better pieces. Stay active fam, I love you so fucking much!

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What the fuck is this?

I LOVE YOU TO SALLY MUAHS AND HIT ME ON PM I WANT TO TRY TO CALL TONIGHT

damn i hate it when i see a good piece like this being rated by some noob who writes down "nice flow".....


MAN.. FUCK YALL.....


Hey W-P,u dont need much feed back on your shit...Not nowa days anyway....lol......But still....dope..1!

That Jewish term thing had me man..!! U thought about this b4 writtin didnt you...!!LOL

anyway man...Holla my shit.... AND WHAT BOUT THIS COLLAB...i already written everything..!!

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=85873

im ready when you are pop

Yo let's make that a triple threat coz i been out for a while so pm dawgs.

Peace

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