Walked into my own shadow, saw myself molded-in-fear/
I'm like a child discovering all the lies told in-its-ear/
Cold-interferes, warmth speaks solely in healthy-domains/
My Soul like the cries of Lunacy if she-felt-me-go-sane/
Losin'-its-grip, I hang with Anxiety as he's-chewin'-his-lip/
Biting his nails, stabbing himself slowly, I see the grooves-in his-hips/
Choosin'-ta-quit, spirits rest deep inside a bottomless gorge/
We're all trapped there, from human minds the streets of Sodom-is-forged/
I traverse-this-wilderness searching for flesh, my words-is-villainous/
The worthless-billions crushed, mere stares disperse-militants/
A surface-pilgrimage before returning to my decrepit-core/
Misery, spite, and Hopelessness spill from my infected pores/
Selected-four Horseman of my own demise, will ride into a thunderous-sky/
So if you reach the lake of virtue, there should be no wonder-it's-dry/
Under the-sly-expressions of Man lies hearts so foul-it's-flagrant/
I dream of mangled corpses lying with their bowels-adjacent/
My scowl-is-vacant, when I smile you should be truly-afraid/
I'm a tormented beast, my eyes encrusted in ruby-'n-jade/
Cowards cruelly-filleted, strangled by their vertebrae, the ground littered-with-bone/
Free Will vanquished, wait for fate to be delivered-in-chrome/
The considerate-prone to suffer, singing their morbid-lament/
Fulfullment's only attained by those whose psyche's horrid-'n-bent/
So before-ya-repent your sins, know there's nothing to apologize-to/
At least I don't see it, in my shadow, Darkness swallows -my- view...

not bad mate, it was an alright piece, i THOUGHT IT WAS good but couldn't hold my concentration all the way through.......try multi's in ya shit and It'll be a lot better.............props to ya tho.good 1st try G.............good anyway, brilliant for a newb

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sigs are for herbs...Thats why I got one!

whatever..idiot.

shut tha fuck up, I give ya props and then ya throw it in my face........................


FAG

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sigs are for herbs...Thats why I got one!

dunt call me a newb cause u been here 2 long.. dawg ill whoop u in the real and in text.. so................shut the fuck up

upping this bullshitt-a

your flow was the best part of this...vocab and mulits were kinda lacking, but good drop kid

if you would be so kind and feed on my last piece
TR and BROOKLYN - Hate Me!

p.s. you still scare me...

WTF?........ Am I The Only Who Noticed This Niggaz' Multi's?.... NE Way Dope Piece......... Keep Up The Good Shit Mixed With That Flow Of Urs........ U Got Potential.......

I was waiting for sumone like you... Thank you. Much love and respect, and props for actually reading my shit...favor for a favor, just holla at me if u need any feedback for any of ya shit..

sounded like some deep ass shit. hot drop. vocab was tight, and the shit just.................. sounded like some nas or some shit
yo peace



the reaper

personaly i thought this piece was ill, vocab was ill, structure was tight, multis were off tha chain, my style mainly consists of multis, real life though, this shit was ill over all, there wasnt anything missin in this, keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

^Back that up for th replies.. Favor for a Favor. i got ya. uno