I wanna verbally assult a dude for i feel like a shredder//
watch this line reach its altitude, like stormy weather//
betta watch what you say before i think your rude//
jump on my shit, watch your line get chewed//

Verbal assult is what i presist in//
throwing lines of insults, instead of bitch ass kissing//
i'm not spitting for fun, so start listening//
i don't need no gun for fight fisting//
I don't need no bitch to tell me how to drop//
i got my own thoughts with there own plots//
a single blood clot can fuck your arteries//
but not with me, i'll probably die from lung disease//
'shoot'........... i made you freeze, jeffory atkins bow down on both kness//
kiss these bitch, while irv get koped by the po-lice, ain't no release when set-ignorance gets hold of the cell keys//
I'm not the bee's kness, but when i spit people freeze please//
take a second to take in my tone of voice//
i spit like this, but not from choice//
i'm poised to be number 1 with alot of noise
in the words of obie trice, 'cheers' for the invoice//


I wanna verbally assult a dude for i feel like a shredder//
watch this line reach its altitude, like stormy weather//
betta watch what you say before i think your rude//
jump on my shit, watch your line get chewed//


Ok, verse 2, this is what we'l do//
pick up from the whole murder inc 'gangsta crew'//
black child i haven't forgotten you//
with ya fat lips which can stick harder than glue//
i never wanted to involve these people//
but with the shit they make, it shud be labelled ilegal//
next time i'll make a sequal, of phony emcee's who create pop singles//
i'm not tryna mingle, or pick a fight//
i'm just setting the record right//
fans wanna hear whats tight, not what faggot jefforys gunna bum tonight//


I wanna verbally assult a dude for i feel like a shredder//
watch this line reach its altitude, like stormy weather//
betta watch what you say before i think your rude//
jump on my shit, watch your line get chewed//

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Proclaimed to the name 'IgnoRance'
from illness 'DeliVerence'

All in All, this was rather wack, i mean, whats the point of dissing a label who'll never reply, pretty pointless waste of time if you ask me.

The first verse, didn't have alot to do with Murda INC as far as i could see. You used simplistic rhyme scheme, with simplistic rhymes, try to expand your vocab and use more complex meanings.

The 2nd verse did have some Disses to it, but the one which mentioned 'Blackchild' was weak,
"black child i haven't forgotten you//
with ya fat lips which can stick harder than glue//"

Th ehook was decent, nice relativity there. Don't think i'm hating, just tryin to help you become a better MC, Uses internals, better metas, expand your vocab. learn about wordplay.

Come up with a more original topic next time

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well i didn't really like this piece, it was to simplistic. and i agree,whats the point! it was a pretty wak topic, not my type of thing, should choose an original topic, sumthin interestin.........peace!