ima jus drop a 10 second free style outa my ass

so it will probs be wack but i dont care i jus wanna elevate n to du dat i gotta practice


i rip catz mindz so hard they moms feel it
they murked so bad not even tha best doctors can heal it
i slash them n gash them lyricly haras them
afta ma rymes they cant even stand again
sum wun beatin me iz like a black guy gettin in da kkk
its impossible... i have them shoutin out loud may day
i leave victims that ive murked phisicly torn
i have them wishin that they were neva born


wahhh kinda short but i went brain dead afta tha last bar

U want honest?...

Try to write, ...real....urs is to played, ...or at least try to write, ..like u bein thru it...

Not i take my nine, ...and shoot em up,
now hes dead,cant fukkin move hes stuck. Blah! shit try to be creative, ...use more vocab ,and not that played aspects, ...
keep writin, ...

Hit up , ...Stand Proud, ...and ull see...maybe u can learn somethings,....

Pz

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Fuck you

Just being honest, so don't take this as hate or anything..

Man, this was completely wack. You should sit down, gather your thoughts, then try to write. Your concepts were played, flow was alright though, and vocab could be elevated, too. Overall, this was one of the weaker pieces I've seen in awhile, but take time to write down your thoughts, and I'm sure the outcome will be much better.

Stay up and keep droppin.

yeah try to be more creative and put ya own touch in it figure out where your strong points are and work on them


but overall not really the wackest i've seen

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