Mama how could you have done this to me,
I thought I was your little girl, your little bee,
I couldn't believe it was you who did it to me,
They put me in jail, and threw away the key,
They took my freedom, I lost my sleep,
Where people are bad and I could not eat,
One day when I'm old and I have no teeth,
I'll remember what you did to me,
You left a scar where the cut was so deep,
I used to dance, I used to lead,
I used to cry, I used to breathe,
I used to think life was free......








"Distroyed my heart, you gave me pain,
Filled my life with doubt, I'm going insane,
I can't remember my life without strain,
You treated me bad all you did was complain,"

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Nice drop. Shows a lot of pain inside, even some anger. Overall the structure is nice, and rhyme sceme is good. Being hurt is one of the worst things in the world, no matter who does it. Anyone could hurt you, and no matter if the physical scars heal, the mental ones are still present. To conclude, I liked the drop. Keep droppin. Most respect

Yes, this was one of the those solid all around peices. It could always use some points to elevate here and there. A bit more description there, and a little bit of editing here and all. But overall it's solid.

Anyway... it must suck to have a backstabbing mother. Sorta makes me glad I don't have one.

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

Thanks I appreciate the good reviews, Yeah it does suck but the
worst part of all is that my dad did it first then my mom backed
him up and thats how she back stabbed. I wrote it short because
The mood was different when I tried to finish... If I think of more
I will add....

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